Fashion design has always intrigued me. Application essay.

my passion for design

Fashion design has always intrigued me. When I was younger, I had a doll I named Piggie whose dress I changed almost every week from scrap materials I got from a seamstress down the street. I'd carefully sit on the floor in my room to draw sketches(albeit sloppy ones) and then get to work with me pair of scissors, some thread and a needle. Piggie gets a new dress-and a bow too sometimes - a day or two later.

I chose to enroll in a fashion school after my secondary education. Graduating two years earlier than the acceptable age of admission into universities in my home country, I decided to learn more about something I've always been passionate about. I could finally learn how to sketch my designs properly, cut the material to fit the design and also put the pieces together on a sewing machine. It is always so fulfilling and satisfying to hold a dress you made from the scratch. It feels like magic when a mere image and figment of your imagination is transformed into something you can actually see and wear, something different and unique. For me, fashion design lets me express myself and show my creativity in ways that will be impossible through other means. So whether it is a short off the shoulder gown with bold flower prints or a more subtle long strapless gown made with lace material, I am definitely trying to make a statement.

My paternal grandfather was a tailor so I guess it is genetic - maybe. The last time I visited his house and sat to use his sewing machine, I felt a kind of connection to him though he died long before I was born.

I do not intend to build a career on fashion design. I always say it is something I want to remain personal to me and that one thing I do for myself. I want it to remain something I do leisurely at my own pace and when I want. Am I crazy for spending two years in fashion school when I know I don't want to make money from it? Probably but in the end, I feel it's not always you money but the pleasure and satisfaction you get that matters.

Fashion design has taught me to be disciplined and believe in myself. I've learnt that there will definitely be situations that you'd have no control over but just as a beautiful dress van be made from an uninteresting looking material, you have the power to turn any circumstance to your advantage . I've learnt that real strength comes from the ability to make the best out of even the worst situation. I believe that this will really help me in college.

@feyisope52 I am not exactly sure what the point of this essay is supposed to be due to the lack of proper common app prop representation. I can't accurately review an essay if I do not know what the interview question you are responding to is about. Sadly, I can only respond to this thread once (unless you make it URGENT) so I hope that my review can still be of help to you even though I do not know what the question you are responding to is.

If you are not entering fashion school for financial gain, then you should explain further about this personal need to attend fashion school. You are right that it doesn't make any sense to spend 2 years of your life attending school when it is not meant to help you advance your career or improve your financial capacity to earn. The reference to your paternal grandfather is not well developed as he is not a direct influence on your love for fashion design. It should not be included in the essay because of this problem. If you cannot connect him as a physical rather than spiritual inspiration, then it won't make any difference in your essay. There is a lack of current connection between your interest and his own skills in the field.

Truth be told, the essay doesn't make much sense to the reader. Your paragraphs are jumping around in relation to your narrative. It is almost as if you aren't sure about what you want to write about. If I knew what the prompt you were responding to was, I would have a better idea as to how to advice you regarding the direction that this response statement should be taking. As of now, I am at a loss as to how to help you further beyond the most obvious problems that I have observed in your work. I hope that my suggestions can still help you revise your narrative somehow.

Should you decide to post the prompt for this essay and you want to get further advice from me, please make sure to make the thread URGENT so that I can come back to help you out.

"Probably but in the end, I feel money is not the principal thing."
I suggest that you change this to: "Probably. But in the end, money is not the principal thing to me." (Avoid using "I feel" to make your voice stronger!)

I really love the anecdote about Piggie in the first paragraph. It provides readers with a very personal and unique perspective. However, I think that you should mention more about what you intend to do with the skills in fashion design. Anyone can write an essay about their leisure-time hobby without making a commitment. The key point is what are you going to do with it--to design clothes for the homeless kids? I believe that it's the way you will apply your passion that sets you apart! :)