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'Favorite place to get lost' - Discuss your favorite place to get lost (UVA)



joiedelire 2 / 4  
Oct 21, 2012   #1
When I am lost in a landscape of pages, surrounded by a sea of words, my lungs full of the scent of paper, I am not interested in being found at all. George R.R. Martin once wrote that "a reader lives a thousand lives before he dies," and that's exactly what I do when I'm "lost." I'm off having an adventure, meeting new friends, living a life I would otherwise never have gotten to live.

I live in a family where both my parents are extremely consumed with managing a family business. I see my dad for maybe two or three hours a day. I grew up with extraordinary older sister who set the standards extremely high and even when she's gone to live in another city, her shadow remains at home. It became inevitable that I wanted an escape from my boring, mundane, often stressed-out life and that's how I discovered fiction. While I may be physically bound to stay in Virginia, living the life of an ordinary student, my minds wanders to 19th century England, a school of witchcraft and wizardry, a camp for demigods, and an institute for shadowhunters.

As I've gotten older, my friends have turned their backs on literature, choosing, instead, movies, TV shows, or video games. I, however, could never forget magic of losing yourself in a good book. I've never forgotten the friends I've made in vampires, werewolves, psychics, witches, warriors, angels, and regular humans.

Lemonsnout 4 / 17  
Oct 21, 2012   #2
Beautifully executed intro in my opinion, Kudos.

But I do feel like you should elaborate a bit more on the details; including what standards your sister set and how they affected you.

Besides that, it's great!
himanshusahay 3 / 24  
Oct 24, 2012   #3
I, however, could never forget magic of losing yourself in a good book.
I, however, have not forgotten the magic of losing myself in a good book.

The rest is good, but you could elaborate further if the world limit allows.
ngonzalez1776 1 / 1  
Oct 24, 2012   #4
joiedelire

It became inevitable that I wanted an escape from my boring, mundane, often stressed-out life and that's how I discovered fiction.

Just my humble opinion here, but I think you should do this:

It became inevitable that I wanted an escape from my boring mundane oftenand stressful-out life, and that's how I discovered fiction.

Otherwise this is excellent, I love it. I'm also applying for UVA, would you like to make suggestions for my essay? For some reason I can't post the link here


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