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'I want to feel proud' - Transfer Essay - Reasons for transferring



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Aug 4, 2012   #1
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

I arrived at Otterbein ready to work hard and succeed. I, like every freshman, was excited to begin my college life and move away from home. I was thrilled to gain some independence and live on my own. I wanted to experience bigger and better things. However, now that I'm here I cannot say that my expectations have been fulfilled. I have been disappointed with what Otterbein has offered me, academically and socially, especially because I travelled thousands of miles to go there (I am Tunisian). So that is why my reasons for transferring are mainly, but not exclusively, academic. In fact, I want to feel like home, to feel like I belong there and most of all that I can succeed there both academically and socially.

At Otterbein, I have developed a greater sense of myself and my abilities, both academic and social. The experience was not that bad. However, with all due introspection and now retrospection, I feel a change is necessary. Nevertheless, attending Otterbein made realize what kind of college experience I really want and what does really matter. So, I came to the conclusion that Otterbein isn't a good match for my interests, goals and future plans.

By transferring to a new school I hope to be able to feel the sense of belonging to the community, to work hard to succeed and get better professional career opportunities in the future. Furthermore, I want to feel proud to be part of the university I choose, feel proud to say that I graduated from that university.

My father studied in the United States and he always has encouraged me to go there as well. I took his word and I sacrificed a lot to come study to the United States and I want that after transferring I will be able to say to myself and to others that it was really worth the sacrifice.

April April 13 / 147  
Aug 6, 2012   #2
Hi Skander,

You should add more about what that school (or the department) you're transferring to has to offer (e.g: the facilities, teachers, mixed culture,...), say what you think of that school, show how well you know and how much you're interested in it (I mean praise the school a little bit), beacause as I finished reading your essay, I couldn't make out what was special about the school, you didn't even mention its name (or perhaps you intended not to post it here, but make sure you state the name of the school you want to transfer to in the real essay).

Good luck!


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