My first thought was always UCF when I heard the question about my future plans

UCF College ESSAY: why did you choose to apply to UCF?

Over the years, when the question "what are your plans for the future?" was presented to me, my first thought was always UCF. Last summer, I finally had the opportunity to visit and I had never been more eager to walk around for two hours in my life. Seeing the student life and all the beautiful architecture made me feel so welcomed and happy, I knew that this was where I wanted to spend my college years. After visiting, I became obsessed with researching everything there was to know about UCF. I began talking to my friends who attend UCF and they would not stop explaining how amazing the academics and the UCF community is. After all the positive feedback, finding out that Psychology was one of the most popular majors was icing on the cake. UCF offers amazing opportunities of virtually any capacity and I know that I can reach my full potential and then some at this university. On top of these academic opportunities, I know I can obtain a lively "college experience" through the vast greek life that is offered. UCF is all I could ever ask for in a university, and I hope to reach my goal of being able to call myself a UCF Knight.

Hi, I wish your essay was more specific. Just summarizing, these are the reasons you give:

You always wanted to go to UCF (but why? You give no explanation at all here}
Student life (this is very vague - every single college has some kind of student life :) what about UCF in particular?}
Beautiful architecture
Friends think it is amazing {still very vague, amazing in what way?}
Psychology is one of the most popular majors {why is this important? Do you want to study psychology? If so, why is having a popular major a benefit?}

UCF offers amazing opportunities {still very vague - what opportunities?}
Vast Greek life

So really, the only two even remotely specific are the architecture and greek life, but those seem very common to many many colleges. Is there any way you can be more specific about those amazing qualities that attract you to UCF? By the way, my niece attends UCF and loves it, so I hear it is a wonderful school. She loves the hands-on mechanical engineering department that includes many projects along with the standard "book learning". Plus, UCF is so close to Cape Canaveral and has many ties with NASA and other high-tech companies and government projects, so as an engineer she will be able to make many contacts and have a wide range of opportunities either to work for a private firm or for the government or if she wants to continue her studies after her Bachelors degree. So see, those are sort of the specific comments you could make, and I really know very very little about UCF - I assume you are the expert! Good luck!

Hi! So I honestly really like your essay but besides the minor grammar edits that have already been commented on I would say to talk a bit more about you. Don't tell admissions what they already know talk more about yourself.