hi everyone , I just wanted to point out that English is my second language and I'm also not very good at writing essays even in spanish which is my first language , so please help me making sure it all makes sense first before giving me ideas on what to add or what to take out , I'd also like to know if I made good use of commas or if I used to many of them, thank you in advance for your help
When I came to the US at the age of 15 years old, I thought learning the language and adapting to the new environment was something I was never going to have an issue with until I started high school , in high school everybody seemed to know each other, and there I was as a freshman with a broken English which made feel like I wasn't going to fit in with the rest of the students , as the months went by I started to feel lonely and since I couldn't speak too much English I was unable to make friends , some classes that required a certain level of understanding of English like science and history became really hard for me and I started to get bad grades , at home I wasn't the same I would always feel overwhelmed with homework since it was twice as hard for me to do because of the language barriers ,as a teenager I wanted to be able to interact with other people my age , go out with friends like any other teenager would do but all this wasn't possible without knowing how to speak English which at that point of my life was something I was struggling with , one day I gave up and I told my mom I couldn't handle high school anymore and that also I couldn't stay in the US living a life where I wasn't happy so she sent me back to Ecuador , when I was in Ecuador I felt that I failed myself and my family for not finishing high school and staying in the US , this affected me in a way that gave me a low self-esteem, it took away confidence in myself and made me feel like a looser in life until one day my grandparents talked to me and convinced me to go back to the US , they said to me that in Ecuador I wasn't going to have the same opportunities that the US could offer me , so I came back to the US determined to learn the language and to be successful in life , I signed up for an adult learning center and started studying for the GED exam, after a few months of preparing myself for the exam ,I took the test and passed it on my first try , having earned my GED made me regain confidence on myself and without noticing it I was also getting better and better at English , months after that I met my girlfriend with whom later I had a beautiful son with, ever since we got together I practiced my English a lot with her and I learned a lot to the point of having enough English skills to take the US citizenship test which I did and passed it with a perfect score and became a US citizen , it's been almost 6 years since I came to this country and now that I'm 20 years old sometimes when I look back at my life I remember that at some point I thought I was never going to be able to learn English and that makes me realize that I've learned a really important lesson and that is that anyone can achieve their goals in life with dedication , hard work and patience and to never give up
When I came to the US at the age of 15 years old, I thought learning the language and adapting to the new environment was something I was never going to have an issue with until I started high school , in high school everybody seemed to know each other, and there I was as a freshman with a broken English which made feel like I wasn't going to fit in with the rest of the students , as the months went by I started to feel lonely and since I couldn't speak too much English I was unable to make friends , some classes that required a certain level of understanding of English like science and history became really hard for me and I started to get bad grades , at home I wasn't the same I would always feel overwhelmed with homework since it was twice as hard for me to do because of the language barriers ,as a teenager I wanted to be able to interact with other people my age , go out with friends like any other teenager would do but all this wasn't possible without knowing how to speak English which at that point of my life was something I was struggling with , one day I gave up and I told my mom I couldn't handle high school anymore and that also I couldn't stay in the US living a life where I wasn't happy so she sent me back to Ecuador , when I was in Ecuador I felt that I failed myself and my family for not finishing high school and staying in the US , this affected me in a way that gave me a low self-esteem, it took away confidence in myself and made me feel like a looser in life until one day my grandparents talked to me and convinced me to go back to the US , they said to me that in Ecuador I wasn't going to have the same opportunities that the US could offer me , so I came back to the US determined to learn the language and to be successful in life , I signed up for an adult learning center and started studying for the GED exam, after a few months of preparing myself for the exam ,I took the test and passed it on my first try , having earned my GED made me regain confidence on myself and without noticing it I was also getting better and better at English , months after that I met my girlfriend with whom later I had a beautiful son with, ever since we got together I practiced my English a lot with her and I learned a lot to the point of having enough English skills to take the US citizenship test which I did and passed it with a perfect score and became a US citizen , it's been almost 6 years since I came to this country and now that I'm 20 years old sometimes when I look back at my life I remember that at some point I thought I was never going to be able to learn English and that makes me realize that I've learned a really important lesson and that is that anyone can achieve their goals in life with dedication , hard work and patience and to never give up
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