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My friends and family would describe me as someone who is very supportive and hardworking. UBC essay

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Oct 9, 2018   #1

Tell us about who you are

UBC Personal Profile Prompt - Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why.

I believe that my friends and family would describe me as someone who is very supportive and hardworking. I have been known to work hard in order to achieve things that I want and in any situation I'm in I make sure to give one hundred percent. My family would say that I never give up when things get difficult and always try to turn a bad situation into a positive. I'm someone who is very loyal and supportive to the people in my life and would do anything for a friend or family member in need.

Something that I'm most proud of about myself is my drive. When I was younger I was very shy and would sometimes not do things out of fear of failure, but as I grow up I've done things that have significantly pushed myself out of my comfort zone and a lot of these things have changed my life. A huge example of this would be theatre. Ever since I was young I've loved theatre but was always too scared to try it out for myself, but within the past few years especially I've managed to overcome these fears and have ended up being in numerous productions which have ended up being some of my favourite memories ever. The memories and friendships I've made will always stick with me and I'm so fortunate to have been able to experience the magic of theatre in such a supportive environment.

I'm really looking for any and all criticism, I know this answer isn't even close to the best I can do and I want to figure out some ways to make it as strong as possible. Thanks so much for the help!
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Oct 9, 2018   #2
Hi Victoria, have you given any thought to providing the response to this question by interviewing one specific person about how they view you as a friend / family member / community member? The prompt offers you the option to use one of the 3 or all 3. Personally, I would just pick one of the three so that I can present a fully focused and developed descriptive response to the prompt. Since you are a person who will be attending college, I believe you should pick either your best friend or a ranking community member (such as a pastor, your team coach, a teacher, or someone similar) to describe who you are because these people can provide information about the type of student community member that you will be once you attend UBC. The reviewer can get a better idea of the type of person you are from these sources rather than your family who tend to see you in a one dimensional manner.

I would ask the person, "What is it about me that you are most proud of knowing and why?". That question tells the reviewer how this person sees you and also, by asking that question, you can strongly support their statement in reference to what you are most proud of about yourself as well. At least you will have a form of continuity in the discussion which will help to cement the type of image that you want to reviewer to create about you as a potential UBC student.

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