Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech? (max 150 words)
The challenging schoolwork at Georgia Tech attracts me. Instead of simply "getting out", I desire to propose comprehensive plans to accomplish difficult tasks. I would enjoy solving hard problems with Georgia Tech fellows in Clough Commons. After brainstorming, I can relax by swimming in the CRC or watching an FBS football game.
Georgia Tech can satisfy my passion for chemical engineering. In the ChBE school, I can immerse myself in the scientific world and further my knowledge through hands-on research. I can collaborate with outstanding professors and students alike in OXE and Tau Beta Pi organizations.
Georgia Tech can help me become a capable researcher. The ChBE School will allow me to explore pharmaceutics and biotechnology. I look forward to developing improvements to modern medicine through great teamwork in the widely acclaimed research program.
I seem to hear George P. Burdell shouting at me: "Go my Yellow Jacket. Think big and solve big!"
Can anyone help me look at this short essay? Thank you !!!
Hi, I think you need to get more into specific particulars about why GT is such a great fit for you. I think the generalities and "name dropping" you mainly have don't really communicate effectively why GT is unique, from say University of Georgia or Clemson or wherever. I actually applied to Georgia Tech long long ago for graduate school, but did not get accepted :( So maybe I am not the best judge :) But I knew exactly why I wanted to go there because they had a special automation graduate degree that was offered by only a select few schools. (I ended up going to Stanford instead, so I guess it all worked out!
Hello Stanford fellow! Thank you so much! Your advice really helps !! ^^^
I will try to make the essay more specific ^^
I have a small question. For "getting out", that seems kinda like a GT jargon: Graduates say "getting out" because GT's school work is very heavy.
Do you think I should change this?
Thx :D
Oh, I see. I looked it up on Wikipedia, and wow, GT has a lot of traditions! In that case I would definitely keep it - your readers will understand the "getting out" reference and I think it is a good touch.
Hi, I think this is better, but there is still room for improvement. Looking at the GT website, they have a special biotech option, which you can mention. It includes courses like Bioprocess Engineering and culminates in a capstone bio-design course. Also, unlike many schools, GT strongly supports undergraduates taking part in research, which would allow you to obtain really in-depth knowledge and the experience of working in a lab alongside professors and graduate students. Also there is an undergraduate summer research program, an intense 10 week program where the undergrads often end up contributing to actual published papers. They even have a undergraduate research symposium in the spring, exclusively for undergrads to present their research results. That seems very unusual to me, usually this is the kind of thing only open to PhD students. So those are the type of specific details I might include in your essay.
Here are some other suggestions:
Instead of simply "getting out", I desire to [take full advantage of the fascinating programs and coursework available in the chemical engineering department].
The ChBE school at Georgia Tech can [stoke] my passion for chemical engineering [with its] opportunities [for] one-on-one work with faculty in the laboratory and [its cutting-edge research].
Hi~ Thanks for the amazing comments and suggestions! I feel ashamed lol >< Even u applied GT long long ago n you still know GT much better than me !
I change some your suggestions cuz the word limits ;V;
Here is the new one:
The academic environment and curriculum at Georgia Tech fascinate me. Instead of simply "getting out", I desire to take full advantage of the fascinating programs and coursework in the ChBE school.
The ChBE school at Georgia Tech can stroke my passion for chemical engineering with its special courses and cutting-edge research. I can learn the integrated bioprocesses of biotech industries in the Bioprocess Engineering Course and explore prototypes with real world applications in Capstone Design Course. I can share my research with school fellows and gain valuable experience in Spring Symposium. I can also collaborate with outstanding professors and students in the laboratory. I want to join the research team who developed new membranes to significantly reduce manufacturing energy. I look forward to developing improvements to industrial scale through hands-on research.
I seem to hear George P. Burdell shouting at me: "Go my Yellow Jacket. Think big and solve big!"
Hi, your content seems better now, but your sentence structure is very repetitive - "I can", "I can", "I can", "I want", "I look", "I seem" - that is literally how each of your sentences begin. I would try to add a little variety. I know you have very few words to work with, but I think you can make it even more concise.
Also, it is "stoke" my passions, not "stroke" - stoke means to add more fuel to a fire.