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I am applying to German Universities for my Masters. Please let me know how it is and suggest ways in which i can improve it. Thanks in advance.
This is how it goes...
"Keeping an inquisitive and explorative attitude, I believe in constant learning process. As a graduate in Mechanical Engineering, I look for Master's Degree to refine my knowledge and skill set in areas of my interest. I feel that it will also open up several avenues as far as my goal of career as a research professional at academic, commercial or research oriented organisation is concerned. I intend to pursue my Master's Degree in order to achieve this goal. Being an ardent adventurous I dare to claim that, throughout my life, curiosity has been the main feature of my personal character. I always sought new challenges, new questions and new answers and I do believe that it has been this love of novelty which has led me towards education success.
As my father works for a service industry, right from my childhood I had umpteen opportunities to engage myself with machines. I had the opportunity to visit a Rail coach manufacturing unit and a locomotive overhauling unit where I was taken aback by the heavy machines and various manufacturing processes. Even before completing my schooling I was determined to purse a course that would fuel my passion for machines. I also discovered my aptitude and love for mathematics and physics at high school. I was keen on pursuing advanced studies in all the three. Mechanical Engineering seemed the right option since it offered the exciting possibility of integrating these disciplines.
In my undergraduate years, I've acquired a strong background in the fundamentals of the basic mechanical engineering subjects. I secured top grade in my class. Mechanics and Finite Elements Subjects captivated my interest. In relation to my interest I underwent a training program at Aeronautical Development Establishment, Bangalore where I received a great amount of knowledge about Hydraulic System Operation and Electrohydraulic Actuator Testing. This practical knowledge helped me understand the theoretical concepts in Hydraulics and Fluid Mechanics.
My first encounter with research was in final year of my graduate course when i was associated with XXXXX. I worked in a project titled XXXXXX. My role was primarily concerned with the aspects of design and development, which also requires me to gain an understanding of MATLAB which was helpful in analysing the feasibility of projects under different working condition.
To specialize in Masters I would need strong foundation in practical application of the concepts which I gained during my time at XXXXX. Here, I was exposed to the rigour of product development. This experience gave a good insight about engineering techniques like Failure mode and effects analysis, DVP&R, Boundary diagrams, FAST Diagrams. Also I have had hands on experience in design of structural parts and pressure vessels. I have been trained and working in PRO/E WILDFIRE and ANSYS. I am a Certified "Associate Value Specialist" from SAVE InternationalŽ which is a premier international society devoted to the advancement and promotion of the value methodology.
Germany has always been the world leader in technology, and without question it is the motherland of Engineering. Germany avails the advantages of securing the best of knowledge, quality of education, good life style and above all the international exposure. Browsing through the information brochure and the University's web page I feel that the Graduate Study in your university holds a lot of promise to me. The research carried out by various institutes on dynamics, Multibody systems and structures are appealing. The breadth and depth of the courses coupled with a stimulating research environment seem to me the right mix for seminal work and pioneering research. I believe that with variety of courses offered and with highly knowledgeable faculty and excellent facilities, the University will provide a perfect environment to focus all my resources towards my goal.
I believe that the program will not only help me find a career in a research organization but also give me an opportunity to explore and broaden the scope of my understanding through coursework and research at your university. I am fully aware that a pursuit in research and academics requires a high level of dedication, determination, motivation and self-discipline. I wish to assure you that, I will meet the above expectations diligently and prove to be a worthy alumnus. "
I am applying to German Universities for my Masters. Please let me know how it is and suggest ways in which i can improve it. Thanks in advance.
This is how it goes...
"Keeping an inquisitive and explorative attitude, I believe in constant learning process. As a graduate in Mechanical Engineering, I look for Master's Degree to refine my knowledge and skill set in areas of my interest. I feel that it will also open up several avenues as far as my goal of career as a research professional at academic, commercial or research oriented organisation is concerned. I intend to pursue my Master's Degree in order to achieve this goal. Being an ardent adventurous I dare to claim that, throughout my life, curiosity has been the main feature of my personal character. I always sought new challenges, new questions and new answers and I do believe that it has been this love of novelty which has led me towards education success.
As my father works for a service industry, right from my childhood I had umpteen opportunities to engage myself with machines. I had the opportunity to visit a Rail coach manufacturing unit and a locomotive overhauling unit where I was taken aback by the heavy machines and various manufacturing processes. Even before completing my schooling I was determined to purse a course that would fuel my passion for machines. I also discovered my aptitude and love for mathematics and physics at high school. I was keen on pursuing advanced studies in all the three. Mechanical Engineering seemed the right option since it offered the exciting possibility of integrating these disciplines.
In my undergraduate years, I've acquired a strong background in the fundamentals of the basic mechanical engineering subjects. I secured top grade in my class. Mechanics and Finite Elements Subjects captivated my interest. In relation to my interest I underwent a training program at Aeronautical Development Establishment, Bangalore where I received a great amount of knowledge about Hydraulic System Operation and Electrohydraulic Actuator Testing. This practical knowledge helped me understand the theoretical concepts in Hydraulics and Fluid Mechanics.
My first encounter with research was in final year of my graduate course when i was associated with XXXXX. I worked in a project titled XXXXXX. My role was primarily concerned with the aspects of design and development, which also requires me to gain an understanding of MATLAB which was helpful in analysing the feasibility of projects under different working condition.
To specialize in Masters I would need strong foundation in practical application of the concepts which I gained during my time at XXXXX. Here, I was exposed to the rigour of product development. This experience gave a good insight about engineering techniques like Failure mode and effects analysis, DVP&R, Boundary diagrams, FAST Diagrams. Also I have had hands on experience in design of structural parts and pressure vessels. I have been trained and working in PRO/E WILDFIRE and ANSYS. I am a Certified "Associate Value Specialist" from SAVE InternationalŽ which is a premier international society devoted to the advancement and promotion of the value methodology.
Germany has always been the world leader in technology, and without question it is the motherland of Engineering. Germany avails the advantages of securing the best of knowledge, quality of education, good life style and above all the international exposure. Browsing through the information brochure and the University's web page I feel that the Graduate Study in your university holds a lot of promise to me. The research carried out by various institutes on dynamics, Multibody systems and structures are appealing. The breadth and depth of the courses coupled with a stimulating research environment seem to me the right mix for seminal work and pioneering research. I believe that with variety of courses offered and with highly knowledgeable faculty and excellent facilities, the University will provide a perfect environment to focus all my resources towards my goal.
I believe that the program will not only help me find a career in a research organization but also give me an opportunity to explore and broaden the scope of my understanding through coursework and research at your university. I am fully aware that a pursuit in research and academics requires a high level of dedication, determination, motivation and self-discipline. I wish to assure you that, I will meet the above expectations diligently and prove to be a worthy alumnus. "