instead of having an ordinary vacation at the beach or the jungle
instead of an ordinary vacation to the beach or jungle.
on top of the mountain
on the mountain top
bottom of the wells., and I finally understood how your beliefs
you would find "yourself" in its silence and attempt to be a beneficial person.
I could find myself and attempt to be a beneficial person.
[try sticking to mainly first person instead of second]
I remember that I was teaching most of the day and I still had enough energy.
I remember teaching many hours and still had a surplus of energy at the end of the day.
seeking into the nature
have a good relationship with the students
has a good relationship with her students.
[sorry, i cant tell if you're a guy or girl :/]
I dont know, but i dont think the exclamation marks are necessary. The content is good. I think your writing could be a little smoother in some parts. Your essays are good overall! :)