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HELPING OTHERS; Past and future goals and decisions


carolina24 1 / 1  
Aug 6, 2008   #1
IM A ADULT RETURNING TO COLLEGE I NEED TO WRITE A ESSAY 3OO WORD OR LESS WHY I WANT TO GO BACK TO COLLEGE HOW MY PAST AND FUTURE GOAL AFFECT MY DECISION. THIS IS WHAT I WROTE

For the last ten year of my life i have dedicate my time to help others. i always go out of my way to make sure my family and friend succeed at what they wanted to accomplish, as time has passed i have realize that i have put my goals of going back to school aside.I did not finish school when i had a opportunitie to do it.i made a choice of going to work to help my family because of neccesaties.I started working at a Dunkin Donuts,from there i have been working in office cleaning.When i was working i use to feel ashamed when other people use to tell me for a young women you should not be doing this kind of job,but i kept my head up cause i knew one day i will have the opportunitie.

throughtout all my accomplishment and dissapointment in life,i have found out for myself that there will always be obstacle that will come in the way and i have to be able to fight these obstacle to reach my goal of going to college. I have two son which i am so proud of, my young one has austism and this had motivated me to work harder for them, I want them to be proud of me and let them know how important it is for them to have an education because if i dont have it what kind of influece it will be for them and i don't want that for them to struggle because they did not finish school. I want to be able to help them as they grow.i feel by getting my diploma i will show my sons and other its never to late to finish school and with hard work and perseverance and you set a goal for yourself everything can be achieved it all depend on me.
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Aug 6, 2008   #2
Your content is good, but your mechanics need a little work. Remember that whenever you are referring to yourself the "I" is always capitalized, whether it is at the beginning of a sentence or not. Also just check your spelling and make sure you do not use casual contractions such as "can't" and "won't" in academic writing; always use the full word (i.e. "cannot," "would not"). Keep up all of your hard work and you will be very successful in school.
OP carolina24 1 / 1  
Aug 8, 2008   #3
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR HELP I WILL LET YOU KNOW IF I GET ACCEPTED YOU WERE A GREAT HELP


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