I struggled so much with this. It's just the short answer, I have no clue why I had so much trouble, but here it is I suppose. It's not very good, but that's why I'm here!
"Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum)."
Ever since 9th grade, I have been volunteering with the Danville Area Humane Society. With other volunteers, I helped take care of the animals that were brought there by feeding and cleaning them. Although each visit is more or less the same, I will never forget my first day there. Upon arrival, I was instructed to give treats to each of the dogs. I noticed that there seemed to be a rather small amount of treats, but I assumed that there was a larger storage elsewhere. After distributing the treats, I decided to do the same thing for the cats. As it turned out, there were no cat treats, nor was there a hidden reservoir of dog treats. The shelter was, and still is, undersupplied given the huge quantities of stray animals. As a result of that day, I have been dedicated to ensuring that all animals receive proper care.
perhaps elaborate SLIGHTLY on how exactly you've helped, it might be worth elaborating on slightly. they wanna know what you've done, and why this was important to you. just think up something that hits that at all angles
Upon arrival, I was instructed to give the dogs treats and I noticed that there seemed to be a rather small amount of treats, but I assumed that there was a larger storage elsewhere.
the area i have bolded is just a suggestion.
I volunteered for the Danville Area Humane Society, because (say something surprising and interesting). With other volunteers, I helped take care of the animals that were brought there by feeding and cleaning them. Although each visit is more or less the same, I will never forget my first day there. Upon arrival, I was instructed to give treats to each of the dogs. I noticed that there seemed to be a rather small amount of treats, but I assumed that there was a larger storage elsewhere. After distributing the treats, I decided to do the same thing for the cats. As it turned out, there were no cat treats, nor was there a hidden reservoir of dog treats. The shelter was, and still is, undersupplied given the huge quantities of stray animals.
As a result of that day, I have been dedicated to ensuring that all animals receive proper care. Now that I cut out all that unnecessary stuff above, you can express the idea of this sentence in 3 or 4 meaningful sentences that give some short term goals.
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