"Ideas through knowledge" - Chicago- How does the school satisfy your wishes.

How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to Chicago. (1/2 paragraphs)

Some time between afternoons researching colleges in the library, reading through countless mailed pamphlets claiming my "high priority" student status, and late nights arguing with friends over the advantages of studying in various parts of the country, I came to love the University of Chicago. It's historical focus on the "life of the mind" is something I couldn't love more. I've always been told (and only occasionally believed) that I "over-think" things. The almost strictly pragmatic stance of my peers to education and knowledge has always starkly contrasted with my insatiably inquisitive spirit. I love to know and I love to learn. At the University of Chicago I know that spirit is fostered. With its renowned body of scholars and educators I am confident that my dream of a top education will be fulfilled. Its passionate student body "arranged" in house systems, excites me with the prospects of meeting lifetime friends who I'll team up with for the "Scav Hunt". And how could I not love the university's location? Set in beautiful Hyde Park, yet in close proximity to one of the largest and most thriving cities in the United States, the university appeals to me not only as a wonderful place to study but as an area around which I could build my future. The flow of ideas around me coupled with the knowledge that I won't simply be a passive listener to the pontification of an erudite professor is what draws me to the University of Chicago.

The essay in itself is strong. I just see a few mechanical errors such as commas and word usage. I feel that when you talk about its location you should expand more on what Chicago can personally offer you. Anyone will write its in a nice location. Try to incorporate your major into the location. Such as if you were into medical, Chicago offers a world leading hospitals that can provide internships or that. Get what I mean? All in all I enjoy it and like its direction on how you commented on school activities.

This sentence if very cool, because the parenthetical comment about occasionally believing something is evidence to support the point made in the sentence. It gives the reader a cool experience.

I love to know and I love to learn. let's not waste words with claims like this. "Show, don't tell."

This is very eloquent, but I think if you are a serious planner of future endeavors the essay will, at least a little, reflect your interests and goals as their achievement can be facilitated by resources and (specific names of) professors at this school.

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