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I'm imagining what will happen if I got a ticket to go anywhere I want. I'll go to the year of 2020.



chanh1239x 2 / 2  
Nov 13, 2016   #1
The fall usually comes with heavy rain, I usually love to sit down in front of the windows and begin imagining. I usually imagining about my family, my past

my friend, Today, I am imagining what will happen if I got a ticket to go anywhere I want. I go to the future, exactly 2200.

The air was absolutely clear, no car or truck, the street just for peasants. On the sky, flying object with the solar panel becomes the main transportation of everyone. The human body is higher and stronger. Their buildings have the strongest structure to prevent any natural calamity like earthquake, tsunami, and thunderstorm. When I walk on the street, I recognize that I am in Hollywood when I see the star under my foot was Barrack Obama's star. I have met one human who is about 2 feet, with long brown hair, and look like a friendly person .She introduced her, she is Alex, an environmental engineer. I use the opportunity to ask about the development of science after 2017 what happened with everything. She answers me base on her knowledge that the scientists have created the chemical compound involve with the original genetic code of all living thing on the earth. That invention helps us create any cell to reborn the species have been extinct long time ago. The government also has the new law to control it.

Another famous invention which was created by chemical engineers and environmental scientists is the Air-cleaning machine. This machine gets the
energy from wind and solar. If a tree averagely uses photosynthesis to produce 260 pound oxygen each 30 second, this machine can create 500-pound oxygen per 8 second. One of special of this machine, that they can also fly to the stratosphere and absorb the UV radiation to produce Ozone each second. In 2100, the Ozone layer was perfect, the Earth has been cooler and under control by the human .This machine has created many oxygens in the atmosphere and it effect with many animals (include human). When the amount of oxygen is double, human become taller and smarter, many species of animal have been evolved or create new species.

Some terrible diseases like HIV/AIDS, SARS, or cancer have a method to prevent and destroy the virus or disease. A man with the help of biologist can

pregnant. Human has discovered many new planets in the universal have enough condition to have a life.

The government tries to control the development of science and technology so they have many new law about married, economy, science. A law that prevents the scientist reborn the dangerous species; A law about LGBT can freely marry; a law to let business and economist increase their income and the development of economic. Pollutant is not legally by any reason in the world.

After talking with her, I look around to see the world in the future. It have many trees, no homeless on the street, human become friendlier, more generous.

They have a same kind of money for all people in the world. This idea comes from a group of economist and they offer it to the governments in every country

and they accept to use it.

The world becomes more beautiful, people become healthier and freedom. No war, no pollutant, no social evil.

barry 4 / 15  
Nov 13, 2016   #2
Your essay is good.
I mean the theme, but the way you wrote the essay is some what under your age.
You can use better sentence formations, essay looks simple I mean just like narrating but doesn't look like a college essay of your age.

Improve the grammar, sentence formation and better make it in paragraphs.

The topic and your view is perfect but it should look some mature. Good Luck!
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Nov 13, 2016   #3
Chanh, the ticket story should be based on your current reality. The ticket does not give you access to a time traveling machine that can take you to the future. Base your imagining on a topic or theme that you can deal with at the present time. Think of where you would want to go where you, as a person, student, or professional, can make a difference in the lives of people. Be reality based in your dreams and aspirations. Make sure that the story you tell revolves around a cause close to your heart. It should be civic oriented. While an academic base aspiration is acceptable, you should try to present a side of yourself that the reviewer may not normally have a chance to know about, since you weren't allowed to do that in the common app prompts. For instance, you can think of how you want to change the world now. Where would you start your quest and how you would begin it. Use the ticket to help you create the future that you envision for yourself.


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