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"the most important path in life" - Vires, Artes, Mores, Florida State Prompt



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Oct 13, 2010   #1
Prompt: For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

I would be challenged to select one word as the mantra of my life, so it is ironic that "Vires, Artes, Mores" are not only a guiding philosophy behind Florida State University, define my life's philosophy. My vires, or strengths, vary so broadly that my weaknesses are few. I am a talented athlete with intentions to participate in intramural football, basketball, and baseball in college. Intellectually, I strive to be the best, meeting challenges head-on. To date, I face a rigorous work schedule and school curriculum with a passion that enables me to multi-task efficiently and effectively. I currently serve president in my schools' Future Business Leaders of America club, hold a part-time job, participate in sports, all while keeping my grades way above par. I see these strengths as an asset that will mold me into a model student in college. I pay close attention to my skills and crafts, or artes. My greatest skill lies in the ability to appreciate the value of an education. The beauty of always learning more and enjoying its benefits lies ahead of me and I will never take it for granted. A Latin saying that I learned at a very young age, "Age Quod Agis Bene", defines the work ethics I live by: "Whatever You Do, Do Well". To live by these words ensures that I complete all the work, challenges and life's lessons to the best of my ability. My character, or mores, is evident in the way I help those in need. It is the mores that I feel best exemplifies my strongest quality. I have spent many hours helping rescued animals and mentoring young children in my community. I receive great satisfaction from sharing my wealth of knowledge, compassion and spunky personality with every human and creature I come across. It is because of my strengths, skills and unique character that I am pursing a career in the medical field and make the greatest contributions to society. My success may not be measured in material things, but in how many people I can help during my medical career. In my family, there has been a custom to give in times of need. Cancer has stricken many of my closest family members. It is because of this deadly disease, I learned the importance of giving: giving my time, compassion, and empathy to those who are suffering. It is because of these personal experiences that I wish to work in health care and help others in my community.

My acceptance into FSU would lead me on the most important path in life, providing me the best chance to succeed in the medical world. It wouldn't be far-fetched to say that FSU could use a hard-working, diligent student such as myself. If accepted, I will settle for nothing less than becoming one of the best medical minds the world has to offer.

natacha 2 / 9  
Oct 15, 2010   #2
Hi i think you should part your essay in 5 parts.its a good introduction.i think you use adequate words to explain what your point.I think its a good one.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Oct 16, 2010   #3
The first sentence is not quite right... seems to be missing some words. But the thing is, I do not think that first sentence is good enough to be worthy of the rest of the essay. It is sort of obvious... vires, artes, and mores cover just about everything, so of course they can cover your philosophy. They are a MODEL for thinking about life, and any person could say the three words capture her or his philosophy.

Know what I mean? So read the essay as you have written it and see if you can think of a perfect intro sentence.

I am a talented athlete with intentions to participate in intramural football, basketball, and baseball in college. Intellectually, I strive to be the best, meeting challenges head-on. Let's not try to tell them everything. Just choose one of the three, and write about it... go deep into it, and use your life experiences to help explain it. Explain your deep understanding of one virtue, and include a lot of thoughtful reflection. Share the best insights you have to share.

A Latin saying that I learned at a very young age, "Age Quod Agis Bene", defines the work ethics I live by: "Whatever You Do, Do Well". --- this is very good!! When you are revising the essay, focus on this and related concepts. Make it so that the essay you write has a memorable main idea.


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