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India- is synonymous to cultural diversity; MIT Essay - background and identity



arunesh 6 / 7  
Dec 9, 2012   #1
Please tell us more about your cultural background and identity in the space below (100 word limit.

The very country that I belong to, India- is synonymous to cultural variety. Hence brought up in this milieu of traditions, I am what I would call a 'heady cultural concoction'. Having born and grown up in the southern states of India, my lineage beads another dash of color: Kolkata, West Bengal. Celebrating colors and respecting the traditions of different states, my family and I celebrate about 14 festivals in a year, the most prominent amongst them being Durga Puja, Kali Puja, Janmasthami, and Diwali.

Moreover, I feel blessed to have paternal grandparents stay with me and show me unbridled support and love all through my early years. Due to the host of reasons mentioned above, a mélange of influences have worked on me throughout my upbringing. An exposure to the Dravidian (south) and Aryan (north) cultures have rendered me fluent in regional languages such as Tamil, Hindi, Bengali, Sanskrit and English of course!

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Aching bones, cramped muscles and an over strained body for the past 13 years, has only made Tae Kwon Do more pleasurable to me. Pursuing this martial art since the age of 5, it has become a part and parcel of my life. After a grueling day of school and theoretical physics research, I find solace in it. My heart pounds, my muscles stretch and strain, and my senses awaken as I feel adrenaline surging through my veins. While at it, my mind and my body work coherently to produce a unique fast-paced sensation. Although I have broken my hand twice while practicing Tae Kwon Do, it still remains a constant throughout my life, and has left my heart craving, for more of it.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 9, 2012   #2
The very country that I belong to, India- is synonymous to cultural variety.diversity

I guess cultural diversity is more appropriate.
Also why not you talk about the cultural diversity of India a little bit.... You have close to 100 dialects spoken, so many communities, religions etc.etc. Just briefly mention about that having you in the centre ;)


my family and I celebrate about 14 festivals in a year, the most prominent amongst them being Durga Puja, Kali Puja, Janmasthami, and Diwali.

good :)

Aching bones, cramped muscles and an over strained body for the past 13 years, has only made Tae Kwon Do more pleasurable to me. Pursuing this martial art since the age of 5, it has become a part and parcel of my life. After a grueling day of school and theoretical physics research, I find solace in it. My heart pounds, my muscles stretch and strain, and my senses awaken as I feel adrenaline surging through my veins. While at it, my mind and my body work coherently to produce a unique fast-paced sensation. Although I have broken my hand twice while practicing Tae Kwon Do, it still remains a constant throughout my life, and has left my heart craving, for more of it.

I think this is well written... good job and Good Luck!
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 9, 2012   #3
The very country that I belong to, India- is synonymous to cultural variety.

I think it's diversity you are looking for.. It would be better to use that instead of variety.

my family and I celebrate about 14 festivals in a year, the most prominent amongst them being Durga Puja, Kali Puja, Janmasthami, and Diwali.

I don't think you need a "in" after "festivals" here.

Is the 1st essay within the word count??
I like the second essay very much. But try to keep things simple with small sentences. You have done a good job nevertheless. :)
OP arunesh 6 / 7  
Dec 9, 2012   #4
yeah thanks


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