This essay is pretty crazy, so please tell me honestly what you think of it! I didn't know what to write, so I pretty much literally went with what my first instinct would be if I were actually writing a note to my future roommate. My main question is whether it's too all-over-the-place and non-serious, but other feedback is also appreciated.
Prompt: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. (1800 characters)
Hi, Future Roommate!*
How are you? I hope you're enjoying this wonderful day. (And yes, I am telling you that you're having a good day - unless you're a zombie, you should, according to my calculations, be alive; and if you're alive, then you're having a good day.) I have a feeling that I'm going to run out of characters very quickly if I keep going like this, so I'll just get to the point now and tell you some things about myself.
I was born in Zaporizhzhya, Ukraine (no, you don't have to know how to pronounce that), and moved to the US when I was seven. I know Russian fluently. I have an absolutely ridiculous number of interests, but since I know that just saying that won't help you whatsoever, I will tell you that I enjoy traveling, horseback riding, writing, reading, and acting. I also like animals and nature, and am pretty much a tree-hugger (so if you don't recycle, be prepared for conversion). I really enjoy learning about new (or new to me) ideas and points of view, and am very curious and interested in new experiences.
Anyway, I can't wait to meet you! College is going to be incredible. Not only are we going to be hundreds of (or, as in my case, over a thousand) miles from our elders (although once the dirty laundry starts piling up, we may reconsider whether that's really such a good thing), we're also going to be studying at one of the nation's leading universities. I think we're going to have an absolutely amazing time at Stanford. So if you haven't been enjoying your day, start now!
Impatiently,
Your Future Roommate
*a.k.a. Admission Committee in Disguise
Prompt: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. (1800 characters)
Hi, Future Roommate!*
How are you? I hope you're enjoying this wonderful day. (And yes, I am telling you that you're having a good day - unless you're a zombie, you should, according to my calculations, be alive; and if you're alive, then you're having a good day.) I have a feeling that I'm going to run out of characters very quickly if I keep going like this, so I'll just get to the point now and tell you some things about myself.
I was born in Zaporizhzhya, Ukraine (no, you don't have to know how to pronounce that), and moved to the US when I was seven. I know Russian fluently. I have an absolutely ridiculous number of interests, but since I know that just saying that won't help you whatsoever, I will tell you that I enjoy traveling, horseback riding, writing, reading, and acting. I also like animals and nature, and am pretty much a tree-hugger (so if you don't recycle, be prepared for conversion). I really enjoy learning about new (or new to me) ideas and points of view, and am very curious and interested in new experiences.
Anyway, I can't wait to meet you! College is going to be incredible. Not only are we going to be hundreds of (or, as in my case, over a thousand) miles from our elders (although once the dirty laundry starts piling up, we may reconsider whether that's really such a good thing), we're also going to be studying at one of the nation's leading universities. I think we're going to have an absolutely amazing time at Stanford. So if you haven't been enjoying your day, start now!
Impatiently,
Your Future Roommate
*a.k.a. Admission Committee in Disguise
