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Prompt: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. (250-650 words)
NOTE: I'm focusing on my interest in science, narrowing it into computer science. I also speak of my work in it and what I hope to focus and achieve.
I had been sitting by a window in a well-lit classroom when my physics professor informed us of the upcoming science exhibition - the opportunity to build anything you wanted and the chance to be the display of the year. Given a timeframe of two weeks, my friends and I decided to build a fully functional wind-turbine. We spent all our time in a workshop, building the frame, dynamo, replica city and multiple fan blades. The experience was thrilling, stimulating and most of all educational. Our project, along with a few others, was chosen to be displayed at the entrance of the exhibition. Although we failed to achieve the display of the year, our turbine was successful.
Science is rewarding when tackled with determination and unyielding passion. The subject has always captivated me, pushing me forward to new extents in order to search and learn new concepts. Growing up, I've always been intrigued by science, the ability to draw conclusions from observations and thereby completely change lifestyles. My love for science often catapulted me to the top of my class and helped frame me with a reputation of asking random science questions just for the sake of understanding. The questions posed by the subject along with the nuances of the various topics often fascinated me, pulling me deeper into studying several unrelated topics.
Over the course of time my field of interest got narrower, I started focusing on a single subject of STEM - Computer Science. About two years ago, I came to know what computer science essentially was - a logical and analytical challenge to a human's thought process, by then I knew this was what I wanted to pursue. Over the course of time, I strived to learn about programming and where it may possibly lead me. Writing a long program and compiling it without errors, producing the pseudocode to a challenging question or finding that one bug which took me hours, these moments were most likely the greatest. These accomplishments instilled a feeling of direction and served the purpose of nurturing my passion for the subject.
Personally, my greatest progress in the field of computer science, one that I truly cherish and enjoy, was when I was offered an opportunity to work in a student organization named Engineer Design Team. I faced a challenge of programming a hexacopter to be autonomous for The International Aerial Robotics Competition. Path planning and mapping are the two main aspects that I focus on programming; primarily using ROS for programming and Gazebo and Rviz for simulation. Working with a team of diverse engineer majors created a table of diverse ideas and coursework, thereby providing me with an unparalleled learning atmosphere. Competing in robotics sharpened my communication skills, honed my team management skills, and opened my mind to new methods of solving problems.
I plan to further narrow my passion of computer science into Machine Learning - the science behind creating code something that could make far better decisions and predictions than man ever could. The knowledge that computers can be made to create something that can think independently is possibly the one single thing that has fascinated me no end. I aim to merge machine learning with quantum computing in order to fabricate supercomputers of unparalleled power. This technology could be integrated into NASA programs for autonomous space travel. Practical applications such as creating industrial mechanisms that can run with substantially improved decision making and more precise automated movements can also become a reality.
Over the past century, computer science has both undergone an exponential growth and produced a revolutionary change in mankind's lifestyle. I'd like to be a driving force in this change. However, I possess only a few drops of this vast ocean of language. I believe that Purdue, being one of the world's greatest research institutions, can provide the cornerstone for my future career as a computer scientist.
Thank You!!
Prompt: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. (250-650 words)
NOTE: I'm focusing on my interest in science, narrowing it into computer science. I also speak of my work in it and what I hope to focus and achieve.
I had been sitting by a window in a well-lit classroom when my physics professor informed us of the upcoming science exhibition - the opportunity to build anything you wanted and the chance to be the display of the year. Given a timeframe of two weeks, my friends and I decided to build a fully functional wind-turbine. We spent all our time in a workshop, building the frame, dynamo, replica city and multiple fan blades. The experience was thrilling, stimulating and most of all educational. Our project, along with a few others, was chosen to be displayed at the entrance of the exhibition. Although we failed to achieve the display of the year, our turbine was successful.
Science is rewarding when tackled with determination and unyielding passion. The subject has always captivated me, pushing me forward to new extents in order to search and learn new concepts. Growing up, I've always been intrigued by science, the ability to draw conclusions from observations and thereby completely change lifestyles. My love for science often catapulted me to the top of my class and helped frame me with a reputation of asking random science questions just for the sake of understanding. The questions posed by the subject along with the nuances of the various topics often fascinated me, pulling me deeper into studying several unrelated topics.
Over the course of time my field of interest got narrower, I started focusing on a single subject of STEM - Computer Science. About two years ago, I came to know what computer science essentially was - a logical and analytical challenge to a human's thought process, by then I knew this was what I wanted to pursue. Over the course of time, I strived to learn about programming and where it may possibly lead me. Writing a long program and compiling it without errors, producing the pseudocode to a challenging question or finding that one bug which took me hours, these moments were most likely the greatest. These accomplishments instilled a feeling of direction and served the purpose of nurturing my passion for the subject.
Personally, my greatest progress in the field of computer science, one that I truly cherish and enjoy, was when I was offered an opportunity to work in a student organization named Engineer Design Team. I faced a challenge of programming a hexacopter to be autonomous for The International Aerial Robotics Competition. Path planning and mapping are the two main aspects that I focus on programming; primarily using ROS for programming and Gazebo and Rviz for simulation. Working with a team of diverse engineer majors created a table of diverse ideas and coursework, thereby providing me with an unparalleled learning atmosphere. Competing in robotics sharpened my communication skills, honed my team management skills, and opened my mind to new methods of solving problems.
I plan to further narrow my passion of computer science into Machine Learning - the science behind creating code something that could make far better decisions and predictions than man ever could. The knowledge that computers can be made to create something that can think independently is possibly the one single thing that has fascinated me no end. I aim to merge machine learning with quantum computing in order to fabricate supercomputers of unparalleled power. This technology could be integrated into NASA programs for autonomous space travel. Practical applications such as creating industrial mechanisms that can run with substantially improved decision making and more precise automated movements can also become a reality.
Over the past century, computer science has both undergone an exponential growth and produced a revolutionary change in mankind's lifestyle. I'd like to be a driving force in this change. However, I possess only a few drops of this vast ocean of language. I believe that Purdue, being one of the world's greatest research institutions, can provide the cornerstone for my future career as a computer scientist.
Thank You!!