The International Business Exchange - NYU supplement advice (Stern)

amazing opportunity to study business

I heard an uproar of applause as I played the last note on the piano surrounded by students wearing bright purple sweatshirts. I snapped a photo to remember this perfect fall day in the center of Washington Square Park hoping one day I'd be back. Surely enough, I was.

At NYU, I would be attending the Stern School of Business with a focus in finance. How many people can say they studied finance 20 minutes away from Wall Street? Only NYU students. As I was studying the different programs I would be taking as an undergraduate, Global Macroeconomics caught my eye. I started surfing the internet to find information on the curriculum and came across a course syllabi and even an assignment for the Fall 2018 class. My affinity for finance and the intricate problem solving that comes with it is one Stern would nurture and blossom into a career. Despite still being a senior in high school, I'm already thinking about the vast alumni network NYU provides and the amount of passion alums have for current students to succeed in the workforce. Along with finance, I am also interested in entrepreneurship and investing lots of my time in The W. R. Berkley Innovation Lab. My junior year of high school, I created a tracking device for disabled children. Stern is the one place that can turn my dream into reality, an actual product for the markets. NYU encourages students to collaborate with others to help succeed in creating a business which is something I value. After all, no one ever started a business on their own without a team.

The International Business Exchange gives the amazing opportunity to study business across the country giving me the chance to expand beyond New York's horizon and delve into the business of another country as well as learning their cultural and social life.

Outside of academics, I want to continue my passion for music by participating in the NYUO ensemble. The sense of community NYU has to offer is something I plan on taking full advantage of by joining clubs such as Undergraduate Stern Women in Business. Coming from an all-girls school, USWB fits my passion to promote the importance of women in leadership positions. Stern is for someone who brings ambition and affinity for business; that student is me.

Any advice on how to make this better would be great. I plan on applying to Stern as my ED II.

I feel like you should put more focus in the first paragraph, and perhaps combine the last two paragraphs in the end, because they're somewhat weak.

also what's so special about NYU's global macroeconomics? How is it different from the global macroeconomics that other colleges offer, and how does that link to your specific interests/skills/personality?

I also think you should elaborate on how you're going to "invest lots of time" in the W. R. Berkely Innovation lab. I got the impression that you only did a quick search on the facilities and chose one. Show off your knowledge about this specific lab to wow the officers.