the invasion of HIV aids - elaborate on your extra curriculum activitues

the invasion of HIV aids into the fray of the human race has been a factor to quite a number of traumas which has jeopardized the pursuit for political stability and the socio ecological Desire of some precise nation and the world at large.

known as a pandemic, it has imposed stress and strain on all and sundry and big men who stood to find cure to put the disease at bay failed.

This catapulted me to vent my anger into a research of the disease and i continue my determination with a clasical study of the disease aided by the spring foundation of my country. the course was keen on the Knowledge of the dangers of the disease which was intended to build a perfect peer youth education

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As you did not describe what kind of assistance you are seeking, I have made some general comments in regards to the piece.

First, make sure you are correctly punctuating and capitalizing your sentences. For a refresher of these as well as basic grammar rules, I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series written by Stephen Reid. You can pick any of them up cheap used, or get them from the library. I think there are six in the series now, and any of them would help you here.

I think you have a good message here, but it is overshadowed by poor mechanics.

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