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Johns Hopkins Supplement-Chemical Engineering



ShaunMac611 2 / 4  
Oct 4, 2010   #1
Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this application, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experience influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)

Since the day I could walk I loved to create. I started with Lincoln Logs, which evolved into Legos and worked my way up to Mega Bloks; I always loved making something from nothing. As I got older I fell in love with the show MythBusters. While I found the concept of "proving urban legends false" entertaining, what I really liked was mapping out blue prints, coming up with a planned experiment and testing the circumstances presented in each myth. Engineering at its core is what I'm truly interested in, I like making plans and creating experiments, I find it interesting to learn new things by doing instead of being taught. Along with this I really enjoyed math. Math was something I knew, even in adolescence, that I would want to pursue in some way in the future.

From a young age I decided to be either an engineer or a math teacher. But during the past two years of high school I found a new love, Chemistry. I became increasingly interested in nanotechnology and took a college chemistry course. Then I stumbled upon Chemical Engineering. This sounded like a major that was specifically molded to my interests. I read about a fabric which "strongly repels water thanks to nanoscale filaments with a spiky structure" and knew this career was for me. The perfect combination of Math, Chemistry, and the best parts of my childhood, I can't see myself majoring in anything but Chemical Engineering.

holmescallas 3 / 12  
Oct 4, 2010   #2
The colleges wants to hear your stories, so try to stay away from talking about all the greatnesses of the college, they already knoew that...You have to "own your story"!
simbamaxxed 5 / 59  
Oct 4, 2010   #3
I have to say I think this is a great and personalised response which really gives the reader a sensible and solid reason why you want to study enginnering.One tiny problem though which I think is a contradiction.Consider this part of your essay:

-Then I stumbled upon Chemical Engineering. This sounded like a major that was specifically molded to my interests.

The paragraph preceding this statement is building the momentum for you to profess your deep intent to pursue engineering,yet when you finally make that point you seem unsure.It's sort of an anticlimax.Consider revising it to something like"Then I DISCOVERED chemical engineering,which I am now developing a deep passion for" or something along those lines.The words "stumbled" and "sounded like" make you seem somewhat uncertain and unconvincing.

Otherwise,a stellar job!good luck.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Oct 7, 2010   #4
Since the day I could walk I loved to create.--- this sentence seems wrong. It is not specific, and it arbitrarily references the time you learned to walk. I think you can give an intro sentence that is better... What comes to mind? Get inspired!

For this part, consider using a colon:
But during the past two years of high school I found a new love: Chemistry.

Wow, your intellectual interests are impressive.

Is there room to write some more? It seems like you could add another conclusion paragraph, so that this last paragraph becomes a body paragraph. If there is room, write a conclusion that considers the implications or tells about your outlook for the future.

Really, though, it is impressive that you feel a sense of certainty about Chem. Engineering.


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