Journalism is my Ambrosia -- Extracurricular Activities Essay for Common App

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

I always thought that I would become the next J.K. Rowling and create a brilliant series of 400 page books that everyone would fawn and die for. That was not the result. After writing the first half of the first chapter of what was to be my first novel, I found that my creative juices just did not want to flow and help me write the other 399 pages that would make this a novel. That was when I found journalism. I consumed the sweet brevity, the furious typing of reporters trying to make a deadline, and the knowledge that what you wrote could change the world. Through my role as editor-in-chief of my school news-magazine to my role as the creator of my personal fashion blog, journalism has intertwined its way into my life so much so that it has become my ambrosia. Journalism has taught me how to be adaptable, quick on my feet, precise in my words, to communicate well to others, and has created so many opportunities for me, from travelling to Louisiana to covering New York Fashion Week.

Hey guys! Thanks for any comments! I hope you guys are as blunt as you need to be, I can take any criticism. Just a fair warning, I have 999 characters already in this passage, so I am cutting it extremely close to the limit.

Thanks

I like the overall sincerity of the piece. The first sentences,

"I always thought that I would become the next J.K. Rowling and create a brilliant series of 400 page books that everyone would fawn and die for. That was not the result. After writing the first half of the first chapter of what was to be my first novel, I found that my creative juices just did not want to flow and help me write the other 399 pages that would make this a novel. That was when I found journalism."

work really well--I can relate to it very well, as well as smirk at the brutal honesty of what you've written.
However, you loose me after that. There's something off about this sentence:

" I consumed the sweet brevity, the furious typing of reporters trying to make a deadline, and the knowledge that what you wrote could change the world. "

Change the structure of this sentence:

"Through my role as editor-in-chief of my school news-magazine to my role as the creator of my personal fashion blog, journalism has intertwined its way into my life so much so that it has become my ambrosia. "

You loose the reader a bit.
Also, you write how you found it, what opportunities it has presented, yet not what it means to you--do this and it will be even better!!

Love, E.