A kid from Mongolia - Northwestern Supplement

When I was six, I used to construct a pillow fort but every time I tried to get in, it always collapsed. Nevertheless, I kept on trying. As a result, I used certain woods to buttress my pillows. Ever since then, I wanted to become a civil engineer.

Civil engineering, one of the renowned departments at McCormick, is my goal. Engineering programs are not the only reason why I want to attend NU. Faculty ratio of 1:9 at McCormick is the ideal ratio for a kid who is from a relatively small class. I like how McCormick challenges its students intellectually in order to strengthen the use of both sides of the brain. Even though I lack usage of both sides of the brain, this "whole-brain engineering" focus appeals to me greatly.

Moreover, I have been a member of AIESEC since Fall, 2015. AIESEC in Mongolia may not offer as many opportunities and resources than AIESEC in NU, but it did inspire me to get the most out of it. I have been in contact with Ian Su, the team leader of outgoing function. We exchanged some of our experiences in AIESEC with each other. I was fascinated by Ian's experience. From there, I realized that opportunities and resources at NU's AIESEC were whole lot different than what I have gotten at Mongolia's AIESEC. Concerning its reach, the level of Team Leader (TL) at NU's AIESEC might be the same level as the Vice-President (VP) here. This whole new level of experience is another aspect of NU that is appealing to me. I want to live through this all too different level of AIESEC experience at NU.

If I get admitted to NU, I will make use of every opportunity and resource it has to offer academically and intellectually.

Bat, it is difficult to gauge the relevance of your essay to the supplemental essay prompt you are trying to respond to. Please provide us with a copy of the prompt that you wrote for so that we can better assess your writing. In as far as the overall content of the essay is concerned, it seems to be alright, though grammatical errors do exist in your writing.

I have some concern regarding your referral to the "whole brain thinking" aspect of NU education. I believe that you should make a clearer declaration of how this appeals to you by providing examples of how you plan to use this to our benefit. Mention a few simple examples that apply to what you have in mind based upon the program.

I am also unsure as to whether the paragraph about AISEC is necessary in this essay. It seems like you are trying to prove a connection between NU and this organization for your benefit. Again, the lack of the prompt is what makes this connection unclear in terms of relevance to your application.

The last sentence that you provided is not really something that appears to have any relevance to your previous responses. Mostly because such a statement is usually made clearer by other common app prompts. I do believe that there is still some ways to go with this essay but can't direct you as to how you should do that until I see the prompt.