Hi, could you please edit this supplemental essay to Colgate University and also comment on it? Thank you so much!
Prompt: We want to get to know you better. What are three words that your best friend would use to describe you and why? 250 words maximum
My best friends would describe me as intelligent, hardworking, and invaluable. Because of my success in my academics and ability to understand difficult intellectual topics, my friends would describe me as intelligent. Concepts that others may not understand easily, especially in math and science, come easily to me. Though I understand most intellectual concepts, sometimes I struggle with something, but my hardworking nature inspires me to do everything possible to understand. For example, as a sophomore, when I was struggling with Pre-Calculus, I went to my teacher for help most mornings and afternoons to get help so that I would fully understand the concepts, which then translated to higher scores on my tests. This hardworking descriptor also presents itself in my self-disciplined nature. Though it is very tempting to watch TV or read instead of finishing my homework, I ignore those temptations and continue to work hard until I have finished what needs to be done. I also am very invaluable due to my commitment of time to helping others, especially in their academics. I dedicate much of my time to helping others understand math and science through Mu Alpha Theta (math honor society) and Science National Honor Society, but also help others in a variety of other subjects outside of these activities. I am happy to assist in whatever they need help with, from physics to English. These three words encompass my core values and are evident in the way that I live my life.