Lafayette Short Answer ("Writing is a game")

Hi, please check this for me, I don't know if it's a little bit long, they don't give any limit, but I guess it's about 250 words, and mine is 280

In an effort to learn more about you, we ask that you describe an intellectual or creative interest or accomplishment.

This is my final version, thank you all :)
p/s: I cannot add a surprise as you suggested, Kevin, my mind is shut now, probably by the application process :)).
The Game of Writing

No one believes that a playful and energetic boy like me is fond of writing short story; to me, typing down a moving story is just like playing game.

I write with the attitude of a chess player. Every time, I start the game with the same chess board - the blank page. Each sentence I write influences the ending, just like moving a chess pieces. I analyze all the possible outcome of my story, and predict how my reader will respond, trying to set a little surprise for them. That is exactly what I will do in a chess game in order to subjugate my opponent. Of course, there is no win or lose in writing, but I will surely be checkmated if anyone can surmise the ending just from the very beginning of my story.

I write like a boy solving a puzzle game. Sometime I set forth an ending that I want to reach, and from the beginning sentences, I've written for that ending. Somehow it's like finishing a puzzle with the left and right side of the picture already done, all I have to do is put the right pieces in the right place of the remaining. It's not easy though, a flawed piece may ruin your work, just like a plot lacks its logic. There was time when I'd almost finished my wonderful story, then noticed that it lacked a vital connection between events, so I had to start over and invent that missing piece for compensation.

The game of writing is interesting just like any intellectual games I have played. Reading comments from my friends - my main readers, gives me stimulation just like playing any other sports. Eventually, who want to play a game he does not like, who can write without inspiration? I will surely continue writing since it is a very intriguing game.

"Writing is a game"- you should probably add the source. If you came up with it, I don't think the quotations are necessary.

I'm not sure if you should write this in the past tense. I think the future tense is more appropriate.

Look at these examples and compare it with the original text.

Each sentence I write will influenced the ending, just like moving a chess pieces. I will analyzed all the possible outcome of my story, as well asand predicted how my reader wouldwill respond, and triedtry to set a little surprise for them. That wasis exactly what I would do in a chess game, in order to subjugate my opponent.

I don't know. Just an suggestion.

Oh, it's just the title that I set, not a quotation. Thank you, i'll take out the quotation

But those stuff are things I've done in the past, how could it be written in future. It sounds a little theoretical to write in future tense.

What do you think about the idea?

Thanks in advance :D

Oh, you should probably underline and center the title when you submit the paper.

Anyways, you always start out with "I write" which is in the present tense, but the rest of the paragraph is in the past tense. I just feel that the tense doesn't match up.

I like the style and the metaphors in this essay though. =)

"Of course there'sthere is no win or lostlosebetween a writer and his readersin writing..."
When saying there is no win or lose in something, it is not between the competitors, but the actual game itself...I think. :) As a general rule, it is also a good idea to not use contractions whenever writing formal essays.

"I write, with the attitude of a chess player. "
"I write, like a boy solving a puzzle game. "
The commas are not necessary in these sentences.

I also believe that the title should be revised to "The Game of Writing" or something similar to that. The title as it is now seems kind of awkward, like a hanging sentence.

The topic of the essay is nice. I enjoy the comparisons that my make between the games and your perspective on writing. However, I believe the last sentences are kind of awkward and can be revised.

"Still no one believes that a playful boy like me would sit down and contemplate a story. They don't know that writing is an intellectual and interesting game. Who would play a game that he doesn't like?"

The fact that nobody would believe you would write a story seems unrelated and unnecessary. Instead of writing about what other people think about your writing skills, it would probably be a better idea to portray your love for writing. For a conclusion you can summarize your view on writing and how it is just as intriguing and stimulating as any other game.

Well, besides the corrections that others did for you ,which I didn't catch when I first read your short essay, I loved how you used chess game and puzzle game to describe your love of writing. I really thought that was a good idea.

Good luck and hope you could get into the one you want :)

Thank you very much

I just got a big shock about Lafayette's international regular deadline, but I will still apply though.

"I write, with the attitude of a chess player. "
"I write, like a boy solving a puzzle game. "

Hehe, those comas are the influence from my native literature =.=, I cannot get rid of those style when writing English

I'll help you use commas as they are to be used for good composition, below. Also, read The elements of Style by Strunk and White to find out more!

Many of my peers do not believe that I enjoy writing stories; to me, typing down a moving story is just like playing game.

I write with the attitude of a chess player. Everytime, I start the game with the same chess board - the blank page. Each sentence I write influences the ending, just like moving a chess pieces. I analyze all the possible outcome of my story, and I predict how my reader would respond, trying to set a little surprise for them. Awesome!!! That was exactly what I would do in a chess game in order to subjugate my opponent. Of course, there's no win or lost between a writer and his readers, but it's surely a big failure for me if anyone can surmise the ending just from the very beginning of my story. Right here, it would be great to add a sentence that comes as a little surprise...