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UC essay- Learn form your mistakes



fizzle138 2 / 2  
Dec 13, 2009   #1
Starting high school I made a lot of mistakes, I made bad choices that affected my academics as well as every other aspect of my life. 9th grade was probably the worst year of my life, but, in retrospect it also served as one of the best. I can look at all the mistakes I made and try to cover them up, or I can look at them and make sure nothing similar to that ever happens again. This turned out to be one of my biggest strengths, the ability to make a mistake, no matter how big or small, and ensure that it never happens again. The feeling of achievement is the greatest feeling in the world, every time I accomplish something I always savor the moment of success. Success tastes even sweeter after following the bitterness of failure.

I had gone through one of the toughest years of my life before leaving for India. The first year of high school struck me with unforeseen pressures and adversity. Although not intended in a harsh manner, students felt racist and prejudice jokes were taken lightly. I too felt this way, but I subconsciously began to strive to display that I was no different than anyone else which distracted me from what was important. I began the year as a confident and achieving student, but ended it as a lost personality with little direction. After moving to India in 10th grade with hopes of starting over, I met with what seemed like a nearly impossible syllabus, and felt defeat rolling over once again. I was enrolled in a program called IGCSE, which is comprised of a two year course spanning both freshman and sophomore years. Though I had only one year to complete the two year course, I slowly began to realize that I was as capable as any one of my classmates. This was the beginning of my newfound confidence. From here on out, I focused on improving myself in everything I did.

"Learn from your mistakes" - this may be one of the most repeated quotes of all times, yet it rings so true. Making mistakes isn't a bad thing, just as long as you've learned from them. Each semester as I strive to better myself, I keep the mistakes I've made in the previous semesters in the forefront of my mind. Some might say that it's not a good habit to keep yourself weighed down with the mistakes of the past, but I use them as a constant motivation. It is the fire that fuels me. Success isn't just one big bang of a moment; rather it is smaller moments of achievements that finally lead to the bigger feeling of accomplishment. Being able to learn from my mistakes has made me the tenacious person I am now. I am still competing to be the best in what I do, and as long as I keep pushing forward, I will be that much closer to reaching my goal.

mcdy143 5 / 17  
Dec 14, 2009   #2
Starting high school, I made a lot of mistakes. I made bad choices that affected my academics as well as every other aspect of my life.

is the greatest feeling in the world. Every time I accomplish something

This essay sounds too plain. You should focus more on details such as the specific difficulties you've faced and put more experiences. Otherwise the AO would lose interest just reading something that seems obvious...

Good luck!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 15, 2009   #3
This turned out to be o One of my biggest strengths turns out to be the ability to make a mistake, no matter how big or small, and ensure that it never happens again ------> how do you know none of them will happen again?

Okay, actually... know what I think? Try cutting everything before this excellent sentence:
Starting high school I made a lot of mistakes, I made ...the ability to make a mistake, no matter how big ...time I accomplish something I always savor the moment of success. Success tastes even sweeter...

That success sentence is a great place to start. Let it be what presents you to the reader. Nevermind getting all down on yourself about bad decisions in the ninth grade; I'm sure you'll explain that in the rest of the essay.

Yes, the essay is very nice without those first few sentences! What do you think of chopping them out?


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