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Learning about biology even medicine is always make my heart happy



doraemon 1 / 3  
May 26, 2012   #1
This field is my hobby and appropriate with my ideal. Learning about biology even medicine is always make my heart happy, enjoy, lighter, and can push me to find out what there are in. My enthusiasm.will risen up to know it. I love to read book about this, and this field of study is really suit well on me. I thirst for knowledge for knowing roof of diseases and knowing even creating solutions to allay that diseases. To be honest, I feel, through medicine, I can get to know more and explore the unparalleled power of God, it can be a way for me to get closer with God. So I love more this field. Thus, that is why I want to major in this field.

Comments are appreciated!

tinie 4 / 9  
May 28, 2012   #2
sorry ... our opinion is different. I do not like learning that requires a genius mind. I am very weak in memorizing. in my class will make a small note when the lecturer gave a talk. I highly respect and take proud of the medical field. I think it is very challenging and requires a strong mental.

gud luck for u ...
OP doraemon 1 / 3  
May 29, 2012   #3
please criticize me more and show me which things I need to improve in my writings
OP doraemon 1 / 3  
May 30, 2012   #4
thanks tinie, help correct my writing .up ! :D
inform 8 / 21  
May 30, 2012   #5
This field is my hobby and appropriate with my ideal.Medicine is my favorite subject.
Learning about biology even medicine is always makesmy heart happy, enjoy, lighter, and can push me to find out what there are in me happy and pushes me forward to learn more. I love to read more booksrelated to my subject, and this field of study is really suitswell on me my interest.

There are number of grammar errors. I have corrected few. Also, you need to improve your sentence structuring. Do not just throw your thoughts. First think about it.

eg. Hobby and a field of interest are two different things.

Check your purpose of writing. eg Is it biology or medicine ? Do not confuse the reader.
OP doraemon 1 / 3  
May 30, 2012   #6
thanks "inform"
my purpose writing is medicine..
i need more correct for my writing.


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