Hi all. I am an international transfer student for Standford and wrote this draft for 1st essay prompt. Any advice, suggestions or criticism is welcomed. Thank you in advance for your help. May God bless you all! :)
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.
He had no legs, no arms... he used to fall down and it hurt him too much. He tried alone 100 times to get stand up and achieved what he wanted. He knew that the life must not end at the time of difficulties. He knew that every difficulty was making him stronger. He was my friend's father who lost his 2 legs and arms after military service in Afghanistan. When he came back home in 2000 after leaving home 3 years before, no one ever thought that he would live for 10 years more happier than he had ever had. Before being an invalid he was a fan of many things. Chess was his life's meaning. After losing hands he learned how to play chess with mouth. 3 years later he became a winner of Valley Chess competition in Fergana. He was keen on music. He used his lost legs to create new music to his songs. Concerts in my hometown were not organized without his participation. People loved him; school children admired him as their teacher. He used to go to schools and meetings to give inspiration, motivation and love to life. I loved him too...
Every time when I went to my friend's home, his father used to either play chess or write a music or song in his room. Just before leaving friend's house I used to have a 10-15 minute talk with him. I used to ask questions about his life,, failure, achievements, and experiences. He always answered: "determination, persistence and optimism are my friends. I take out experience from everything what I do... and my dedications lead me to fulfill my dreams..." His words always impressed me, gave encouragement and passion to achieve intentions in my life. His influential lifestyle helped me to build a vibrant personality and academic environment. I achieved new experiences from every challenge that I faced. I studies so hard, expecting my future happy professional life. I took every opportunity that is best for me. And when one success door closed, I looked for another open. The life of my friend's father helped me to develop my intellectuality to life. I would say that he made a lot of people happy, or at least mine before leaving this world happily.
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or an experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging.
He had no legs, no arms... he used to fall down and it hurt him too much. He tried alone 100 times to get stand up and achieved what he wanted. He knew that the life must not end at the time of difficulties. He knew that every difficulty was making him stronger. He was my friend's father who lost his 2 legs and arms after military service in Afghanistan. When he came back home in 2000 after leaving home 3 years before, no one ever thought that he would live for 10 years more happier than he had ever had. Before being an invalid he was a fan of many things. Chess was his life's meaning. After losing hands he learned how to play chess with mouth. 3 years later he became a winner of Valley Chess competition in Fergana. He was keen on music. He used his lost legs to create new music to his songs. Concerts in my hometown were not organized without his participation. People loved him; school children admired him as their teacher. He used to go to schools and meetings to give inspiration, motivation and love to life. I loved him too...
Every time when I went to my friend's home, his father used to either play chess or write a music or song in his room. Just before leaving friend's house I used to have a 10-15 minute talk with him. I used to ask questions about his life,, failure, achievements, and experiences. He always answered: "determination, persistence and optimism are my friends. I take out experience from everything what I do... and my dedications lead me to fulfill my dreams..." His words always impressed me, gave encouragement and passion to achieve intentions in my life. His influential lifestyle helped me to build a vibrant personality and academic environment. I achieved new experiences from every challenge that I faced. I studies so hard, expecting my future happy professional life. I took every opportunity that is best for me. And when one success door closed, I looked for another open. The life of my friend's father helped me to develop my intellectuality to life. I would say that he made a lot of people happy, or at least mine before leaving this world happily.
