"Life is good! Put family first" - UC prompt #1

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

One of my dad's favorite sayings is...Life is Good! I truly feel fortunate to be living a good life. I grew up in loving home in a safe community surrounded by many friends and extended family members. The closeness I have with my parents and older brother is something that I will always treasure. I have wonderful memories of birthday celebrations and neighborhood parties. With my family's Italian heritage, food has always been part of our way of life. Both my father and mother have put a significant amount of effort to create our positive lifestyle. They have always been a huge support system for my brother and me. My parent have always believed in us and supported our goals, especially our educational goals. My father is a college graduate with a master's degree in business. For nearly my entire life my father has been the sole provider of our family's income. Given my dad's high level of education and his strong work ethic, he has been able provide a very comfortable living. Shortly after I was born my mother decided to give up her business career and become a full time homemaker. Having my mom at home added an extra element support in my daily life. I was able to participate in many extracurricular activities; including dance, which has become my passion. However, experience has shown me that not everyone is as fortunate to have had all the wonderful opportunities that I have had. And as my dad also likes to point out, life is not always fair and you need to work extra hard to achieve your goals. So my hope is to earn a college degree, develop a successful career and provide a good life for my future family. I know my dreams can be achieved if I follow the example my parents taught me to hard work and always put family first.

I hate to do this to you, but I have seen this essay countless times. I highly suggest coming up with a more creative way of tackling this essay because right now it is very bland. If you really can't think of anything else, try and describe your life in more vivid details or give examples so the reader stays interested. The whole point is to have a good flow, keep it interesting, and come to a solid conclusion at the end.

Once again, sorry. I am just trying to help you out :/

This sentence is missing a word:
With my family's Italian heritage, food has always been part of our way of life. ---food is part of everyone's way of life. I know what you mean, but add a word to make this more specific. Perhaps an adjective to modify "part."

Both my father and mother have put exerted a significant...

However, experience has shown me that not everyone is as fortunate enough to...

So my hope is to earn a college degree, develop a successful career and provide a good life for my future family. ---you can only do that if you have a plan! I tell all essayists the same thing: set some specific goals. It is not useful to just assert that you will earn a degree and be successful. Goal-setting is necessary, and if you have goals you should mention them here (i.e. dreams and aspirations)

:-)