Ok, so I have to do these supplements for F&M and would love to hear feedback for them (grammatically, phrasing, etc). I know that these aren't the best, but I hope you can get the gist of what I'm trying to say from them. The second one is a little sloppy, I'd agree, but a 100 word limit is really tough to do.
On September 27, 1777 Lancaster served as the nation's capital for a single day. If you could do anything or be anyone for one single day, what would you do? (150 word limit)
Truthfully, the first thought that developed was becoming a celebrity. But the more elaborated on it, the more I learned how trivial it was. I asked myself one question: why would I want to live a life so dramatic, when I could be living a life of genuineness? Then, the idea of becoming a travel photographer came into mind. A life of simplicity, yet so complex; I'd be living my dream of traveling the world as well as documenting every moment of it. I want to be able to experience a new culture every time I wake up, to see how others live in their respective societies and learn from those I meet. With the knowledge I obtain, I want to be able to give share my perspective of the world and inspire people to travel and to be able to understand how others live their daily lives.
Why F&M? (100 word limit)
Growing up in Pennsylvania, I was well aware of the prestige F&M carried. A few of my friends have gone to study at F&M and they would constantly boast about how their experiences were; how beautiful the campus is, how active the professors are, and how friendly their fellow classmates are. On top of that, F&M has the reputation of covering the majority of need-based aid, which I desperately need after the financial troubles my family has experienced. F&M looks to be a great fit for me and I too would love to boast about my experiences at F&M.
On September 27, 1777 Lancaster served as the nation's capital for a single day. If you could do anything or be anyone for one single day, what would you do? (150 word limit)
Truthfully, the first thought that developed was becoming a celebrity. But the more elaborated on it, the more I learned how trivial it was. I asked myself one question: why would I want to live a life so dramatic, when I could be living a life of genuineness? Then, the idea of becoming a travel photographer came into mind. A life of simplicity, yet so complex; I'd be living my dream of traveling the world as well as documenting every moment of it. I want to be able to experience a new culture every time I wake up, to see how others live in their respective societies and learn from those I meet. With the knowledge I obtain, I want to be able to give share my perspective of the world and inspire people to travel and to be able to understand how others live their daily lives.
Why F&M? (100 word limit)
Growing up in Pennsylvania, I was well aware of the prestige F&M carried. A few of my friends have gone to study at F&M and they would constantly boast about how their experiences were; how beautiful the campus is, how active the professors are, and how friendly their fellow classmates are. On top of that, F&M has the reputation of covering the majority of need-based aid, which I desperately need after the financial troubles my family has experienced. F&M looks to be a great fit for me and I too would love to boast about my experiences at F&M.