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Some live intellectually stagnant lives; Stanford Sup- What Matters and why?



QWERTY1995 3 / 8  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
Note- This is a rough draft and it was tough finding something to write about but here goes. Tear it apart, please.

So many people live intellectually stagnant lives. I look around today and see people who are worked to death. Their learning stopped prematurely. They are living just to live. There is nothing more, nothing deeper. I want contribute to society and impact the world. I still want to make something out of my life that is not just trite, lest I get caught into a mundane routine lifestyle. That is why my biggest fear is that I will leave this world without leaving proof that my life was meaningful. I do not want to be like an insignificant breeze, passing through life without doing much. I remember watching Conan O'Brien's NBC Late Night Show farewell and Conan said that "nobody in life gets exactly what they thought they were going to get, but if you work really hard and you're kind, amazing things will happen." There is a lot to take from that. I agree with that statement and I try to make the most of my life. I remember watching a youtube video of a high school teacher giving a speech at a high school graduation. To the seniors, he said "you are not special". This speech reminded me of a satirical internet meme, which pitted age versus expectations. Understandably, the expectation dropped dramatically for middle aged adults. As a high school senior, I am part of America's wishful youth. Our expectations are high. I think that it is okay to have somewhat naively optimistic hopes. After all, the few people in the world that are able to do what they want all had those naively optimistic dreams and goals. I do not know what I want to accomplish yet, but I do know that I want to do something that will make my existence meaningful. That is what matters to me the most.

OP QWERTY1995 3 / 8  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
bump 10char. lol just had to do that.
Dabbagh 7 / 11  
Dec 30, 2012   #3
QWERTY1995
- "I think that it is okay to have somewhat naively optimistic hopes."
It sounds like you're tip-toeing around your feelings. Be more direct.

-"I do not know what I want to accomplish yet, but I do know that I want to do something that will make my existence meaningful."

Try to make it sound a little less vague. It might make you sound like you are lost and don't know what you want.

Good essay overall. I like the details that you included.
OP QWERTY1995 3 / 8  
Dec 30, 2012   #4
I appreciate the advice!
Udensi 3 / 7  
Dec 30, 2012   #5
Basically the essay is real good..and the part where u talked about conan find how to put that at the begining to draw the attention of the reader


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