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TOPIC: What is the best advice you have ever received? Describe how it has helped you and how you have used it.
"Persevere and move forward, my son" said my father as he patted those words on my back. His words echoed through my left ear and out the right as we stood watching planes taking off from the runway. Smiles cover the concerns and worries that filled his heart as a parent. My dad showed no signs of remorse as we exchanged our goodbyes. As I would later discover from my mother the sorrow he had driving home. It was on the night of my departure to my new high school in the States, as a junior. Eager to experience the new surroundings, I was unaware of the bumpy road that lies ahead.
Sweat secretes from my palm as I nervously haul my bulky luggage along the narrow dorm hallway. Nervous, excitement, and fear. all of these emotions bombarded me simultaneously. Never being parted from my family for more than a month (and inhabiting a dependent character, I was in doubt about my future as a boarding student. As the only Thai student in school, loneliness immediately became the first challenge I faced on the first week of school. My mind wandered nostalgically about friends and family back home. Reminiscing about family made me remember my dad's advice to persevere. I repeated his message in my head, and it made me feel better and also helped me become optimistic about my loneliness. After all, the primary objective of being in a boarding school was for me to transcend into a more independent person and strengthening my mentality. It was not as if I was the only student in the dorm that was feeling like the way I felt. Other students are probably also yearning to be with their family and friends in their country. Day by day, I opened my heart to other students, in hopes of fabricating a friendship. I engaged other students, conversing with them about interests, school, and sports. I became more open towards other people, making friends with people from various countries, learning about their cultures, and forging strong bonds with them. A month later, my dorm became like my second home. As I walk through the hallways people greeted me, joked with me, and gave me cool gang-like handshakes.
The advice guided me through times of difficulties and gave me hope of moving forward. "Persevere and move forward." This advice made me realize that I could not just cling to my past, I must move on in life and deal with other challenges that lie ahead, whether it was stepping out of my comfort zone and meeting new people, or learning to be independent. My dad's advice changed my perspective on life and made me realize that facing challenges is part of our daily lives; we all face challenges differently, and these challenges make us stronger and tougher both physically and mentally. No matter what life throws at us, we must embrace it and make the most of it.
THANKS!!
TOPIC: What is the best advice you have ever received? Describe how it has helped you and how you have used it.
"Persevere and move forward, my son" said my father as he patted those words on my back. His words echoed through my left ear and out the right as we stood watching planes taking off from the runway. Smiles cover the concerns and worries that filled his heart as a parent. My dad showed no signs of remorse as we exchanged our goodbyes. As I would later discover from my mother the sorrow he had driving home. It was on the night of my departure to my new high school in the States, as a junior. Eager to experience the new surroundings, I was unaware of the bumpy road that lies ahead.
Sweat secretes from my palm as I nervously haul my bulky luggage along the narrow dorm hallway. Nervous, excitement, and fear. all of these emotions bombarded me simultaneously. Never being parted from my family for more than a month (and inhabiting a dependent character, I was in doubt about my future as a boarding student. As the only Thai student in school, loneliness immediately became the first challenge I faced on the first week of school. My mind wandered nostalgically about friends and family back home. Reminiscing about family made me remember my dad's advice to persevere. I repeated his message in my head, and it made me feel better and also helped me become optimistic about my loneliness. After all, the primary objective of being in a boarding school was for me to transcend into a more independent person and strengthening my mentality. It was not as if I was the only student in the dorm that was feeling like the way I felt. Other students are probably also yearning to be with their family and friends in their country. Day by day, I opened my heart to other students, in hopes of fabricating a friendship. I engaged other students, conversing with them about interests, school, and sports. I became more open towards other people, making friends with people from various countries, learning about their cultures, and forging strong bonds with them. A month later, my dorm became like my second home. As I walk through the hallways people greeted me, joked with me, and gave me cool gang-like handshakes.
The advice guided me through times of difficulties and gave me hope of moving forward. "Persevere and move forward." This advice made me realize that I could not just cling to my past, I must move on in life and deal with other challenges that lie ahead, whether it was stepping out of my comfort zone and meeting new people, or learning to be independent. My dad's advice changed my perspective on life and made me realize that facing challenges is part of our daily lives; we all face challenges differently, and these challenges make us stronger and tougher both physically and mentally. No matter what life throws at us, we must embrace it and make the most of it.
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