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'It was love at first strum' - Common App Short Answer: the ukulele



garfunkel129 5 / 15  
Dec 31, 2009   #1
PROMPT: In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).

Any feedback? Suggestions? Anything is appreciated. Thanks!


It was love at first strum. I could practically feel tropical sunshine, the melody washing over me like mild waves: ukulele. While I've always loved music, this instrument seemed as if it were tailored to fit me. Like me, the ukulele is sometimes very funny, sometimes very calm, but always small and cheery. I like to think that in my life, there are endless possibilities. Similarly, the ukulele challenges its player to push creative boundaries for a unique musical experience. However, with its bright sound, it's difficult to make the ukulele sound melancholy. I can spend hours playing adaptations of my favorite acoustic songs, poppy radio tunes, hard rock anthems, or simple scales, and never once does the ukulele fail to warm my heart or stimulate my imagination. The ukulele is my catharsis, my amusement, my challenge. Some call it a hobby; I call it love.

FarhanWasim 2 / 7  
Dec 31, 2009   #2
Very well written. I especially like ur last line. But in my opinion, u wrote more about the instrument rather than the activity, i.e. u playing it.

Would u take a look at my 1?
Wanderer_x 5 / 84  
Dec 31, 2009   #3
I like to think that in my life, there are endless possibilities.

I sense a bit of structural problem. My suggestion : "I believe that there are endless possibilities in life."

Well written indeed! Nice conclusion.

If you can spare few minutes, please help me with my supplement:
vincentcanlas 6 / 21  
Dec 31, 2009   #4
I like how you elaborated on your hobby but at the same time you tell something a lot about yourself. That is what this part of the application is for. :)

IF you've got time, please leave a feedback on mine:


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