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What makes you happy?
My parents' happiness! That's what makes me happy.
From the time of my birth, my parents have worked ceaselessly to make me satisfied. They have tended to all my needs, and have selflessly provided all that I ever desired. But, in all these years, there are two moments that are really etched into my memory; my sister's birth and the recent earthquake crisis.
I was eight when my sister was born. I vividly remember my parent's faces at that time. The look of exhilaration and happiness that was clearly visible in their faces....indescribable! Despite the prospect of sharing with a sibling, I was happy because they were happy. And I want to make them happy like that forever.
After the big earthquake of 2015, there was a huge economic crisis in my country. The prices of virtually everything ricocheted. This presented as a huge financial burden for my parents. The sorrow in their faces when the income was barely enough to sustain the family....ineffable! I never want to see another look like that on their faces again.
After all the pain and sorrow that my parents have gone through for me, it's my responsibility to provide them the happiness that they so richly deserve. With high hopes and expectations, they have sacrificed so much to support my education; I am determined to study hard to fulfill their dreams. And, at the end of the day, a smile on their faces will make all the efforts worthwhile.
What makes you happy?
My parents' happiness! That's what makes me happy.
From the time of my birth, my parents have worked ceaselessly to make me satisfied. They have tended to all my needs, and have selflessly provided all that I ever desired. But, in all these years, there are two moments that are really etched into my memory; my sister's birth and the recent earthquake crisis.
I was eight when my sister was born. I vividly remember my parent's faces at that time. The look of exhilaration and happiness that was clearly visible in their faces....indescribable! Despite the prospect of sharing with a sibling, I was happy because they were happy. And I want to make them happy like that forever.
After the big earthquake of 2015, there was a huge economic crisis in my country. The prices of virtually everything ricocheted. This presented as a huge financial burden for my parents. The sorrow in their faces when the income was barely enough to sustain the family....ineffable! I never want to see another look like that on their faces again.
After all the pain and sorrow that my parents have gone through for me, it's my responsibility to provide them the happiness that they so richly deserve. With high hopes and expectations, they have sacrificed so much to support my education; I am determined to study hard to fulfill their dreams. And, at the end of the day, a smile on their faces will make all the efforts worthwhile.
