ok so I need help determing if this essay answers the prompt 1 question or prompt 2 question. my first post was deleted...and I need help with grammer as well as using more complex words. thank you
Prompt 2: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
"Mama, where's dad?" I was 5 years old when I asked that dreadful question and I didn't get an answer until I was about 9. All I knew was that I would be living with my mom and brother. Every Tuesday would be the time me and my brother would meet my father and eat dinner with him. I suppose some people would say that it was terrible not to tell me about the divorce however I felt it was good that I didn't get an answer. It kept me from depression and gloominess. If I was told at an early age, I would have become a totally different person, much like the people I knew who had divorced parents. Many of the people I knew had bad grades, a terrible attitude, and heavily relied on drugs.
When I was told the full story, it didn't really have an impact in my life because I had barely thought about it. However as the years passed, I realized that I wouldn't have a father-figure in the house. No one would teach me how to shave, talk to girls, or play sports. I had a strong relationship with my big brother and he had always been there for me and taught me new things. In a way, he became a father and a brother to me. My brother had taught me how to play basketball and study efficiently. When I saw how fast he had matured, I wanted to become like him. He became the "man" of the house and it inspired me to grow up and become independent.
With my mom working most of the day and my brother becoming increasingly busy with school work, I had to learn how become responsible and independent. I soon became curious about how to do housework. I began to observe how my mom would cook dinner and do laundry for me and my brother. I thought to myself, if I could learn how to cook for myself and clean for myself then I wouldn't have to depend on my brother or mom. Therefore I can help out while my brother is out studying and my mom is out working. I wouldn't be a "baby" and be helpless in doing simple tasks.
Over the few years, I had become much more mature than my friends were and it made me proud that I wanted to become a "man" much quicker than others. Even though the divorced made a "gap" in my life, I quickly recognized that the "gap" could be filled up with determination and hard work. It may have seemed like a tragic experience; however there were some upside to it. I became much mature and prepared in the life ahead of me and I hope I can become a better person than my father was.
Prompt 2: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
"Mama, where's dad?" I was 5 years old when I asked that dreadful question and I didn't get an answer until I was about 9. All I knew was that I would be living with my mom and brother. Every Tuesday would be the time me and my brother would meet my father and eat dinner with him. I suppose some people would say that it was terrible not to tell me about the divorce however I felt it was good that I didn't get an answer. It kept me from depression and gloominess. If I was told at an early age, I would have become a totally different person, much like the people I knew who had divorced parents. Many of the people I knew had bad grades, a terrible attitude, and heavily relied on drugs.
When I was told the full story, it didn't really have an impact in my life because I had barely thought about it. However as the years passed, I realized that I wouldn't have a father-figure in the house. No one would teach me how to shave, talk to girls, or play sports. I had a strong relationship with my big brother and he had always been there for me and taught me new things. In a way, he became a father and a brother to me. My brother had taught me how to play basketball and study efficiently. When I saw how fast he had matured, I wanted to become like him. He became the "man" of the house and it inspired me to grow up and become independent.
With my mom working most of the day and my brother becoming increasingly busy with school work, I had to learn how become responsible and independent. I soon became curious about how to do housework. I began to observe how my mom would cook dinner and do laundry for me and my brother. I thought to myself, if I could learn how to cook for myself and clean for myself then I wouldn't have to depend on my brother or mom. Therefore I can help out while my brother is out studying and my mom is out working. I wouldn't be a "baby" and be helpless in doing simple tasks.
Over the few years, I had become much more mature than my friends were and it made me proud that I wanted to become a "man" much quicker than others. Even though the divorced made a "gap" in my life, I quickly recognized that the "gap" could be filled up with determination and hard work. It may have seemed like a tragic experience; however there were some upside to it. I became much mature and prepared in the life ahead of me and I hope I can become a better person than my father was.
