I have seen a lot of different formats for this section and I'm a bit confused so I'd like - no, I'd LOVE some feedback on if I'm doing this right.
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).
Heaps of brass and rows of flags - these items dominated my past four years. When I started marching band, I first experienced the pain of doing three hundred crunches or marching a show four times in a row. But I also experienced the joy of hearing that final note reverberating under the football stadium lights. Naturally, I was eager to start the next year as a band "veteran." However, our band director was unexpectedly arrested and fired, causing our band to collapse. Seniors acted out, making yelling and walking out a common part of practice, but I was determined to lead, not discourage. I dedicated hours to leading individuals as well as the group in playing music, marching technique, even personal obstacles. Marching band pushed me physically and musically, but mostly, it pushed me to step out of my long-held role as "follower" and to be a true leader.
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When I said "marching a show four times in a row," for you non-marching band people, does that come across clear enough? And these are some details I really wanted to add because I could not fit them in the ACtivities section but they constitute a HUGE part of my extracurriculars as far as volunteer work:
I set up movie nights, created and maintained the band's websites, made newsletters, compiled photos- everything I could to maintain optimism and enthusiasm. As a Band Council Member and fundraiser liaison, I organized fundraisers and rides and volunteered at pancake breakfasts, car washes, concession stands, and performed for community events like parades, baseball games, and in the pep band for school football and basketball games.
But I guess it isn't good to treat this as a laundry list type thing. However, I really need to include that because other wise, it seems like I have no volunteer work. Suggestions? Thank you!!
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).
Heaps of brass and rows of flags - these items dominated my past four years. When I started marching band, I first experienced the pain of doing three hundred crunches or marching a show four times in a row. But I also experienced the joy of hearing that final note reverberating under the football stadium lights. Naturally, I was eager to start the next year as a band "veteran." However, our band director was unexpectedly arrested and fired, causing our band to collapse. Seniors acted out, making yelling and walking out a common part of practice, but I was determined to lead, not discourage. I dedicated hours to leading individuals as well as the group in playing music, marching technique, even personal obstacles. Marching band pushed me physically and musically, but mostly, it pushed me to step out of my long-held role as "follower" and to be a true leader.
149/150
When I said "marching a show four times in a row," for you non-marching band people, does that come across clear enough? And these are some details I really wanted to add because I could not fit them in the ACtivities section but they constitute a HUGE part of my extracurriculars as far as volunteer work:
I set up movie nights, created and maintained the band's websites, made newsletters, compiled photos- everything I could to maintain optimism and enthusiasm. As a Band Council Member and fundraiser liaison, I organized fundraisers and rides and volunteered at pancake breakfasts, car washes, concession stands, and performed for community events like parades, baseball games, and in the pep band for school football and basketball games.
But I guess it isn't good to treat this as a laundry list type thing. However, I really need to include that because other wise, it seems like I have no volunteer work. Suggestions? Thank you!!
