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prompt College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.
Mathematical, my dream
I dreamed of a wide open road, with emerald green highway signs, and a groundbreaking skyline. I was dreaming about my future, using my favorite tool of math to help organize the city of tomorrow in a myriad of ways.
"Hurry up! You don't want to be late for your first day!" My mother interjected. My daydream was interrupted, and I suddenly remember that it was my first day at American school. In the car, I imagined leaving a deep impression to classmates on first day. However, I could hardly complete a full sentence, and my broken English led some kids to stare amusingly at my stutter. Soon, I became discouraged about my ability to succeed in school. A week later, Ms. Mylowe, my lead teacher, talked with me: "Tony, I knew you had difficulty conquering language obstacles, but I heard that you have a talent at mathematics, why don't maximize your talent?"
With this tide of encouragement, I found a new immediate goal. I wanted not only to be good at mathematics, but to apply it to real world problems. I discovered that math is a potent combination of empirical knowledge and logic, underling functionality of practically every process from rocket science to the budget of a household. In November, I became the first place winner in the school Mathematics Superbowl. I can never forget that Mr. Frank, the principle, referred to me 'the most gifted boy in the school' on the ceremony. Moreover, Ms. Mylowe made up a story to describe my obsession with math: I stared at the bottom of the river; curious and occupied, "Why are you staring at the fish?" My friend asked. My reply sounded strange. "I'm trying to figure out the angle of elevation of the river base from this point."
The torrential, unpredictable, ever-changing currents overwhelmed me. Without conscious thought, I gradually began correlating real-life to mathematic principles, whether it is the number of audiences in school bus, or the trajectory followed by falling stone. Math was the beacon shining at the end of my elementary school career, my light at the end of the tunnel. Numbers speak to me as if they were a psychologist and I was a patient - they have the same cathartic effect as a psychologist or a best friend. At the age of twelve, it was math that empowered and injected me with confidence and energy.
My grinding resolve and feisty demeanor in mathematic did not burst from a single event. Pushed by my passion, they grew with me as I was enduring hardships in a foreign elementary school. Enkindled by social issues, their intensity grew within me as I aspired to solve problems beyond the horizon of pure technicality. I envisioned a ground for which I could apply my knowledge and experiences in a larger arena. I found my place in Cornell University's College of Art and Science. Besides, with the Double Majors program, I can study both mathematics and economics. Economics is a way for me to take mathematical formula into daily life problems: my goal since twelve.
I need this help. Thanks a lot.
prompt College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.
Mathematical, my dream
I dreamed of a wide open road, with emerald green highway signs, and a groundbreaking skyline. I was dreaming about my future, using my favorite tool of math to help organize the city of tomorrow in a myriad of ways.
"Hurry up! You don't want to be late for your first day!" My mother interjected. My daydream was interrupted, and I suddenly remember that it was my first day at American school. In the car, I imagined leaving a deep impression to classmates on first day. However, I could hardly complete a full sentence, and my broken English led some kids to stare amusingly at my stutter. Soon, I became discouraged about my ability to succeed in school. A week later, Ms. Mylowe, my lead teacher, talked with me: "Tony, I knew you had difficulty conquering language obstacles, but I heard that you have a talent at mathematics, why don't maximize your talent?"
With this tide of encouragement, I found a new immediate goal. I wanted not only to be good at mathematics, but to apply it to real world problems. I discovered that math is a potent combination of empirical knowledge and logic, underling functionality of practically every process from rocket science to the budget of a household. In November, I became the first place winner in the school Mathematics Superbowl. I can never forget that Mr. Frank, the principle, referred to me 'the most gifted boy in the school' on the ceremony. Moreover, Ms. Mylowe made up a story to describe my obsession with math: I stared at the bottom of the river; curious and occupied, "Why are you staring at the fish?" My friend asked. My reply sounded strange. "I'm trying to figure out the angle of elevation of the river base from this point."
The torrential, unpredictable, ever-changing currents overwhelmed me. Without conscious thought, I gradually began correlating real-life to mathematic principles, whether it is the number of audiences in school bus, or the trajectory followed by falling stone. Math was the beacon shining at the end of my elementary school career, my light at the end of the tunnel. Numbers speak to me as if they were a psychologist and I was a patient - they have the same cathartic effect as a psychologist or a best friend. At the age of twelve, it was math that empowered and injected me with confidence and energy.
My grinding resolve and feisty demeanor in mathematic did not burst from a single event. Pushed by my passion, they grew with me as I was enduring hardships in a foreign elementary school. Enkindled by social issues, their intensity grew within me as I aspired to solve problems beyond the horizon of pure technicality. I envisioned a ground for which I could apply my knowledge and experiences in a larger arena. I found my place in Cornell University's College of Art and Science. Besides, with the Double Majors program, I can study both mathematics and economics. Economics is a way for me to take mathematical formula into daily life problems: my goal since twelve.
