Hello! I wanted other opinions on my personal statement to see if I followed the prompt given, my statement was compelling and unique, and to cut down the length as I am a little over 300 words. My major is very competitive so this statement must be unique and impactful!
Thank you!
The Personal Statement is an opportunity for you to describe yourself and why you are applying to the desired program. Describe how a degree in this program fits into your future plans and career goals. Use evidence such as complete course work, professional experiences or volunteer activities. Limit the response to 300 words or less
The mind and body are two of the most powerful tools we have available, but their potential is rarely appreciated; I am guilty of the latter. In high school I worked out almost every day. I was skinny and felt physically sound. I thought I was the picture of perfect health, but I would mentally degrade myself and cause emotional, sometimes physical pain if I was not perfect. I developed a bad relationship with food because I did not know how to handle it. Sophomore year of college I began to research different diets, their effects, and the roles they played in one's health. My self-esteem began to rise as I understood the food I was putting into my body and how it would be processed. I craved dietary information and its impacts so much I had to make my passion a career. I needed to enlighten others on the impacts of a healthy diet. My desired focus as a dietitian recently came into light due to my association with Project Heal; an organization that raises money for men and women to receive treatment for their eating disorder. Members tell stories of their struggles with food, fear of looking at their bodies in the mirror, and their self-loathing. As a dietitian I want to provide individuals with accurate and healthy information on how to handle their diets along with mental support to increase self-esteem and create a successful transformation into an overall healthy individual. My present goal is to be admitted into the Medical Dietetics program and educate individuals to the best of my ability on how to view themselves positively and lead a healthy lifestyle. I plan to do this through friends or a social media platform based on knowledge I have gained from research as well as nutrition and science related courses. Ultimately, I would like to open my own practice to promote and educate not only on healthy eating habits, but on a healthy mind. I want a practice that promotes overall health of the body and mind because a person is not truly healthy unless they are both physically and mentally sound.
Thank you!
The Personal Statement is an opportunity for you to describe yourself and why you are applying to the desired program. Describe how a degree in this program fits into your future plans and career goals. Use evidence such as complete course work, professional experiences or volunteer activities. Limit the response to 300 words or less
physically and mentally sound human being
The mind and body are two of the most powerful tools we have available, but their potential is rarely appreciated; I am guilty of the latter. In high school I worked out almost every day. I was skinny and felt physically sound. I thought I was the picture of perfect health, but I would mentally degrade myself and cause emotional, sometimes physical pain if I was not perfect. I developed a bad relationship with food because I did not know how to handle it. Sophomore year of college I began to research different diets, their effects, and the roles they played in one's health. My self-esteem began to rise as I understood the food I was putting into my body and how it would be processed. I craved dietary information and its impacts so much I had to make my passion a career. I needed to enlighten others on the impacts of a healthy diet. My desired focus as a dietitian recently came into light due to my association with Project Heal; an organization that raises money for men and women to receive treatment for their eating disorder. Members tell stories of their struggles with food, fear of looking at their bodies in the mirror, and their self-loathing. As a dietitian I want to provide individuals with accurate and healthy information on how to handle their diets along with mental support to increase self-esteem and create a successful transformation into an overall healthy individual. My present goal is to be admitted into the Medical Dietetics program and educate individuals to the best of my ability on how to view themselves positively and lead a healthy lifestyle. I plan to do this through friends or a social media platform based on knowledge I have gained from research as well as nutrition and science related courses. Ultimately, I would like to open my own practice to promote and educate not only on healthy eating habits, but on a healthy mind. I want a practice that promotes overall health of the body and mind because a person is not truly healthy unless they are both physically and mentally sound.