<<<<This is my response to the common app question stated above. I need a thorough edit/touch to this piece to make it perfect for admissions. So please check for any punctuation and or any changes needed. I have made many drafts, however, I need more to make it acceptable and interesting for the admission folks. Thank you>>>>
Hi Taymour!
You are a wonderful writer! I had to make a few changes and corrections, but they were all minor. I wish you a lot of luck with your pending transfer! You seem to know exactly what you want to do!
--Mark :)
During my second semester at my current university, I spent about two months working with the university's Entrepreneurship Society. At first we began at a slow
pace,pace; however, on the third session I really got interested.
While meeting new and interesting undergraduates
, my involvement allowed me to interact informally with professors as well as leading local entrepreneurs.
Then and there I realized I wanted to join the ranks of
businessthe business person .
Upon my return to the American University in Cairo for my sophomore year, I learned
that the available BA major
s do not include Entrepreneurship
,; hence, my eagerness to look for alternative universities offering such a
major.major was initiated.Being an American national who grew up in the Middle East
, my preferences understandably are stateside rather than Europe or the UK.