Hi, please help me improve this undergraduate admission essay. I apologise if it's not well done and thanks.
I did not know how tired my mother has had been until one night when I heard her snore. What I knew was, she used to be a well off housewife, until my father failed his business. After which she has had to work in order for to make ends meet, and after work, she has to take care of the housework. Only after finishing the housework, she would then has the time rest and catch her favourite television drama series, where I often find her sleeping halfway through the series. With that, a day is over for her without any form of leisure.
I have always thought that working is easy, but I knew I was wrong when I have started working during my school holidays, in which I realised working was taxing both to the body and mind. Nonetheless, taking care of a house is also not simple, and to think my mother did this arduous and repetitive task for years, and yet, she did not utter a single word of complain in front of my sister and I.
There is no need for her to say it out to educate us, from her spirit and altruistic care and concern for us alone, would be enough to inspire me to have perseverance and give me strength to overcome obstacles.
Regards,
I did not know how tired my mother has had been until one night when I heard her snore. What I knew was, she used to be a well off housewife, until my father failed his business. After which she has had to work in order for to make ends meet, and after work, she has to take care of the housework. Only after finishing the housework, she would then has the time rest and catch her favourite television drama series, where I often find her sleeping halfway through the series. With that, a day is over for her without any form of leisure.
I have always thought that working is easy, but I knew I was wrong when I have started working during my school holidays, in which I realised working was taxing both to the body and mind. Nonetheless, taking care of a house is also not simple, and to think my mother did this arduous and repetitive task for years, and yet, she did not utter a single word of complain in front of my sister and I.
There is no need for her to say it out to educate us, from her spirit and altruistic care and concern for us alone, would be enough to inspire me to have perseverance and give me strength to overcome obstacles.
Regards,