Hey guys!
This my crappy first draft for the common app. I' am really close to the app deadline and i need help urgently. Please feel free to criticize my essay and give suggestions.
I resented my parents. How could they be so heartless? My parents had announced to me their decision to move to a new place. "But it's my senior year", I whined for the millionth time. My dad had been offered a new job which meant that I would have to go to a new school. I spent hours feeling sorry for myself at the thought on not being able to graduate from high school with the people I had gotten to know.
This was not the first time I was moving to a new place. Growing up, I had moved around a lot. My whole life, I had been moving from one apartment to another, switching schools frequently. I had been the new kid so many times that I started to feel that I might be stuck with that label forever. It was not easy being the new kid and nobody knew that better than I did. I had switched schools so frequently that I would joke with my friends how my life was jinxed because I had never stayed in one school for more than two years. My whole life felt like a never-ending train ride. In my short life of 17 years, I had lived in so many different places that I often felt that I do not belong anywhere. The hardest part was leaving behind friends and having to start all over again in a new environment where I didn't know a single soul.
During my freshman year of high school, I moved to United States. This move was perhaps the most significant because unlike other places I had been to this was a completely new world for me. The whole culture was foreign to me. I had moved thousands of miles away from instead of moving from one city to another. I remember the first day at high school, sitting alone at lunch, feeling that I would never fit in anywhere.
Moving is hard but I have discovered that in many ways it has helped me become the person I 'am today. Moving to all the different places has brought me in contact with so many cultures and different people. Most importantly, by learning to adjust in all the different places, I have grown in to a more resilient person.
In the end, I don't resent my parents. I realize that their decision to move was made out of the right intentions. As my parents, they are always looking for something better for their children and I 'am grateful to them for that. So after a week of whining and angry glares, I give my parents a break and start preparing to move once again. Moving to a new school during my senior year is tough. But I' am determined to overcome any challenges that come in my way and make the best of my senior year.
P.S: this is not my final draft. I know this needs a lot of work. This is just kinda the basic idea of how my essay will look like. I would really really appreciate any suggestions. Thanks in advance!
This my crappy first draft for the common app. I' am really close to the app deadline and i need help urgently. Please feel free to criticize my essay and give suggestions.
I resented my parents. How could they be so heartless? My parents had announced to me their decision to move to a new place. "But it's my senior year", I whined for the millionth time. My dad had been offered a new job which meant that I would have to go to a new school. I spent hours feeling sorry for myself at the thought on not being able to graduate from high school with the people I had gotten to know.
This was not the first time I was moving to a new place. Growing up, I had moved around a lot. My whole life, I had been moving from one apartment to another, switching schools frequently. I had been the new kid so many times that I started to feel that I might be stuck with that label forever. It was not easy being the new kid and nobody knew that better than I did. I had switched schools so frequently that I would joke with my friends how my life was jinxed because I had never stayed in one school for more than two years. My whole life felt like a never-ending train ride. In my short life of 17 years, I had lived in so many different places that I often felt that I do not belong anywhere. The hardest part was leaving behind friends and having to start all over again in a new environment where I didn't know a single soul.
During my freshman year of high school, I moved to United States. This move was perhaps the most significant because unlike other places I had been to this was a completely new world for me. The whole culture was foreign to me. I had moved thousands of miles away from instead of moving from one city to another. I remember the first day at high school, sitting alone at lunch, feeling that I would never fit in anywhere.
Moving is hard but I have discovered that in many ways it has helped me become the person I 'am today. Moving to all the different places has brought me in contact with so many cultures and different people. Most importantly, by learning to adjust in all the different places, I have grown in to a more resilient person.
In the end, I don't resent my parents. I realize that their decision to move was made out of the right intentions. As my parents, they are always looking for something better for their children and I 'am grateful to them for that. So after a week of whining and angry glares, I give my parents a break and start preparing to move once again. Moving to a new school during my senior year is tough. But I' am determined to overcome any challenges that come in my way and make the best of my senior year.
P.S: this is not my final draft. I know this needs a lot of work. This is just kinda the basic idea of how my essay will look like. I would really really appreciate any suggestions. Thanks in advance!