Of these words, Artes and Mores seem to be the most prevalent in my life.
The word that appealed to me the most was Artes. I've been a musician for eight years and I fully understand how dedication to a skill pays off in the end. Music is definitely an aspect that takes perseverance to succeed in. As we all know, when someone is first leaning an instrument, they definitely don't start at the professional level. When I first started playing piano ...
"Of these words, Artes and Mores"Artes" and "Mores" seem to be the most prevalent in my life.
The word that appealed to me the most was Artes. I'veAvoid using contractions in formal academic writing. been a musician for eight years and I fully understand how much dedication to a skill pays off in the end. Music is definitely an aspect that takes perseverance to succeed in. (Removed-unnecessary statement.) When I first started playing piano in church when I was ten years old Ididn't have much of an idea of what I was doing. I remember sometimes as I played, looking out into the audience and seeing the look of disgust on my peer's and even some adult faces. Despite this, I still had my family to encourage me to continue on. So I did. For a time, I dedicated at least an hour everyday to playing piano. Now at the age of seventeen, I'm the lead musician at a church that has a band of six. I'm drum major of the high school marching band. I'm a piano teacher. I've won over ten competitions for piano. I also play tuba, saxophone, and guitar (I also have many achievements in these). Now I want to further my music knowledge and education through college.
In my opinion, Mores is the most important word of the three because without tradition or character nothing in the world would be worth the effort of pursuing. I am currently a senior at Palmetto Ridge High School. Most people would argue that there is no tradition at my school considering that is currently only five years old. I see this as being a heavier weight on the current students' shoulders. Since there is little tradition here, our class has to set the standards of character and traditions for generations to come. Our band is a perfect example of how this is being done. The band always receives superior ratings at every invitational they attend. This is the main goal of each individual band member. At the beginning of each year this same goal is passed down to the newcomers, who endeavor to pursue it more than the year before. This band has not only taught me music to a new extent but it has given me a different view of character. Being the drum major this year, I finally understand what it means to be an example. It has taught me leadership and discipline. It has taken my level of character to a new level, along with the help of my role models: my band director, my step-dad, and my mom. How have they influenced you?
This is why the meanings of these words are so essential to my life."
It wouldn't hurt to expand upon your conclusion a bit also; it is very abrupt as it is.
yes i know that it is abrupt but i'm limited to 500 words. that is also the reason why there are so many contractions.
should I include the essay topic or could i just delete to allow myself more words?
As to the word limit, it is best to then condense some of the more frivolent or unnecessary statements down to their most concise meanings; contractions in formal academic writing are inappropriate, and many instructors will count down for them.
Unless specifically stated, the prompt is not generally needed as an inclusion to your paragraph. If you feel the need, you can open your essay with a complete sentence answering the prompt, but that may require you to rework your whole introduction.
i decided to just delete the last part. "along with the help of my role models: my band director, my step-dad, and my mom." because that would lead to a entire new long paragraph. i'm expanding on the main topic of the last paragraph leading into a conclusion. i also fixed all of the contractions. thank you for all of your help :)