'IB News Station and Newspaper Club' - Personal or Academic Interests

When I was in grade five in elementary school, my teacher of Chinese read to us a composition she considered excellent. It was written by me. From then on, whenever I am going to write, I feel excited; whenever I come across campus magazines, newspapers in grandpa's pocket or magazines in mother's drawers, I just cannot help reading them with great delight.

When I was in junior high school, I gradually found my interest. TV commercials, broadcast program or advertising on road sides all fascinated me greatly. Whenever I saw vivid news report, I said to myself, "This is my future career."

At a family gathering, I met an aunt who works for Beijing Youth (whose circulation ranks top in China). I asked her how to write a good news report and how to produce a popular newspaper. She answered, "The specialized knowledge is quite important. I majored in media and this laid a solid foundation for my career development."From then on, I confirmed my determination to pursue a degree in media studies.

My interest attracts my attention to various media news. After searching information from your website, I find your university is exactly where I am longing to study. As I find out, College of Media of your university is composed of Department of Advertising, Department of Journalism and Institute of Communication Studies. It also contains over 80 research centers and labs. The university boasts a beautiful campus, seasoned staff and excellent students. Faculty in the College of Media have earned numerous nominations and awards in both their professional and academic careers. Included among them are 21 Pulitzer Prize winners and 18 Nobel Prize winners. The faculty enjoy a high reputation among media circle and it surely is where I want to pursue my degree.

Currently, I am going to graduate from my senior high school, so it follows that I am eager to enter your university for further education. Meanwhile, with my rich experience gained from my work in IB News Station and Newspaper Club in my school, I can contribute to the diversity of your university with my various skills, strong abilities and intense passions.

Hello seatoy,

One thing that strikes me on my first read is your praise for the university.

It's my opinion (I may be wrong), that you probably excessively praise the university. The university is after what suits YOU. They already know that they are good and so it would be superfluous to write about their reputation.

So what I suggest you should change is to change the excessive praise into something about how it fits you (i.e. why they should choose you...)

Talk a bit more about your interest in media. : )

When I was in grade five in elementary school, my teacher of Chinese read to us a composition she considered excellent. It was written by me. From then on, whenever I was going to write, I felt excited; whenever I come across campus magazines, newspapers in grandpa's pocket or magazines in mother's drawers, I just could not help reading them with great delight.

The faculty enjoy a high reputation among media circles, and it surely is where I want to pursue my degree.

Meanwhile, with my rich experience gained from my work in IB News Station and the Newspaper Club in my school, I can contribute to the diversity of your university with my various skills, strong abilities and intense passions.

Good luck! You write well in English, too!

Great thanks to Ivy and Kelvin!