NYU Supplement - famous New Yorker, year 2050, short poem

Here are the Personal Statements for NYU's Supplement for the Common App(all these r supposed to be really short answers - 250 characters max i think):

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do?(Your New Yorker can be anyone - past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)

I was first thinking of Donald Trump (and I sincerely would LOVEE to meet him - i was going to talk about how we could visit his Trump World Tower n have dinner n i could learn about what his normal day's like and talk about how he learns from his failures to become one of the most successful men etc... n i was going to have a good quote from him) I really do admire Donald Trump, or at least his success, and i read his blog every so often - butt i was talking to my friend and she brought up a good point - she said that it will not stand out cuz a LOT of ppl would choose Mr. Trump, which is true. So then I was thinking of writing about Leonard N. Stern, the founder of NYU's Stern School of Business. I really love business and that's my choice of major so I was thinking of choosing someone related to that? is that a good idea? my dad was telling me to write about the founder of NYU - idk would that be better? do you guys have anyone else in mind that would be good??? i feel like choosing someone from NYC should be easy - but it's not, please help!

Write a haiku, limerick, or short(eight lines or fewer) poem that best represents you.

I've never really written poems before and I am horrible when it comes to creativity so I tried my best, please provide me back with honest, helpful feedback:

I look to the future and see mountains to climb, rivers to cross
The winding roads of possibility open up their limitless paths
I control the route I take, I am the master of my destiny
I'm the queen of hearts, the mistress of my own desires
Everywhere I look, light showers down - giving me confidence and hope
My dreams, my goals, guide my every path
I will reach my destination, ready to face any chalenges in my way
What borders are there now? What obstacles?

I'm not really feeling the last line, my dad to said to take those questions out n leave it just as is. But I was thinking of maybe changing that to something about me being to able to conquer or overcome any obstacles... or tearing down the borders or walls that keep me from reaching my dreams or whatever. Any ideas?? Please tell me if you think I can subsitute some better words in or if something doesn't make sense! Also, I'm not sure if this is the kind of response they r looking for when they say to write a poem "that best represent you"? what do u think??

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

I had a hard time w/ this one, cuz like I said - I suck when it comes to creativity.
I was thinking of calling it: "Diaries of a Tabula Rasa" -- I'm not sure, I thought mentioning Tabula Rasa sounded cool, I'm not sure if Diaries of Tabula Rasa is catchy though - what do u guys think? have any suggestions? or other ideas?

Also, the part I REALLY need a lot of help with is what my story line should be - it should of course fit the title, but I have NO IDEA what to say yet. Can someone please really help me get started on this?? I was thinking that it could maybe be a comedy, since I feel like my life's mostly like that n i love to make ppl laugh. But I also want it to be something with a powerful message - but I'm not sure whether they want a specific life experience or something that encompasses my entire life. I was maybe thinking it could talk about the adventures I have as a student at NYU - but in a clever, funny way... which is where I get stuck. Please help me with this!!

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interest you most abou your intended discipline

I haven't written this, but I think I got this under control. I'm going to talk about why I want to pursue business of course, but if you guys have any suggestions for what kinds of comments I should include, please feel free to suggest them!

I'll post everything - my final responses - again in the next couple days so you guys could just read and review it. But this is due on January 1st, so pleasse help me soon!!!

Thanks so much for helping me with this, I know this was a really long post - sorry for that. I just really want to get into NYU, it's my #1 choice and I feel like this supplement and my essays are what's going to make it or break it for me - since I fit the typical NYU ratings for students in every other area... but I want my supplement to stand out. Thanks for your time you guys!

I agree with your dad on the last line of the poem. Don't end with a question, end with a strong statement that NYU people will never forget. Maybe even make the second to last line a question, and the last line its answer. But you don't want to sound questioning at the end, you want to come off sounding strong and assertive.

What borders? What Obstacles?
Well whatever they are, I'll defeat them!!

Something to that extent...

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do?(Your New Yorker can be anyone - past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)

I think that's even worse than Trump, not gonna lie. I'd think about doing an answer that's less... textbook perfect. Don't do someone associated with NYU if you're worried about other people doing the same thing.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short(eight lines or fewer) poem that best represents you.

Cliche. I'd rewrite it. 90% of the NYU poems I've read on here are about striving for success, beating obstacles, blooming from a seed to a flower. I mean, come on. That's the most obvious answer possible.

I disagree with owls. Even though 90% poems he read on here are about striving for success doesn't mean you can't. If that's how you really feel, you should keep it. Unless you just made it up o.o...

the poster seemed worried about writing the same thing as everyone else. if she's really so worried about this, the LAST thing she wants to do is send that poem. it's a million cliches tied up into a couple lines.

Just be genuine. Like for example, here's what I was going to do, I was going to apply to NYU but changed my mind, so it's fair game if you want it: Aaron Copland.

Often credited for adapting music to embody American features, Aaron Copland is truly quintessentially American and a New Yorker. As a musician, I truly appreciate the additions of American and Mexican culture he incorporated in attempt to draw the public back into the practice of a lengthier, and consequentially, more developed songs. I would like to meet the man who utilizes American ingenuity with such success as to revive the old by creating something new out of two ancient practices. I treat Copland to live performances of rap because it would be intriguing to see how he would revolutionize music from the roots of another prevalent minority group in America.

It's a little long, about 100 characters, but it should work. it has a strong sense of why. it borrows from the idea of success, but adds a personal twist to it.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short(eight lines or fewer) poem that best represents you.

sorry, it's a bit late for me, but i'll continue editing this a little later. i thought you might like what i have now as soon as possible, deadlines are fast approaching!

fuschiafleur - alright, thanks for helping me w/ the last line - i think i'll incorporate something like that in :)

owls - thanks for your feedback, I totally agree with you for the first part. As for the poem, what kind of topic that I write about do you think will set me apart from the rest of the applicants?

Juniper_Jumper - Thanks a lott for your reply. I looked up Aaron Copland and I think I will use him, he seems like a great person to write about. And I'm looking forward to your other editings - very helpful!

Thanks to everyone who replied! I really appreciate taking your time to help review this for me. I shall work on it today and post my final draft tonight or tomorrow for review and editing. In the meantime, please reply back with any ideas/suggestions/comments. :D

Hey,

1. I think you should write about the author, its more personal and unique which is what I think they are looking for

2. I love the limerick! It sounds really good

3. I am having such a hard tome with this one myself. I like your titles, they are pretty creative. The best piece of advice I can give is- how do you want the admissions people to perceive your movie. Remember that the whole point is to show them something about you. Keep that in mind and you should be fine

First off, I thought that too as I was doing my NYU application. I chose Donald Trump as well in light of wanting to pursue Business in NYU. Based on your ideas if you are to write about him, you seem to have A LOT of ideas. Just take note of the character limit. I struggled with the limit and I had to cut my response down more than 3/4s. Anyway, whoever you choose, just make sure to focus your answer on how it will make you be a better individual.


I think that you have listed over-too-much. I am not sure though. It seemed like you were just rallying off bunch of things you did. You should try looking at actually saying about something you were really interested at and how it made your past summer/s special.

I would appreciate any feedbacks on any of my essays! Thanks and good luck to us!

I look to the future and see m ountains to climb, rivers to cross

Everywhere I look, light showers down ...

or is this limerick better:
I'm not sure if limericks have to rhyme, but I think they traditionally do and your rhymes are a little weak. Also, your syllable count is off.

I admit, I have a confession
About my constant, yearning sensation - Bad rhyme
To prove I'll do better
Not settle for lesser
This is my secret obsession This rhyme is perfect. The couplet lines are okay, but I think it still would be better if everything actually rhymed. [/quote]

I just think the poems should represent YOU specfically a little bit better. I'd try to focus more on your life. Or if you're so stuck on writing about these dreams and goals, maybe be less broad and ambiguous. It still seems cliche to me. Try for some creativity. Write about something different. Unless your poem is written in the most beautiful manner, a poem written on this topic won't stand out among the thousands of others on the same topic.

for everyone who's writing the same prompt... i just have a question, the NYU short answer famous New Yorker prompt says the famous new yorker doesn't necessarily have to be born and raised in New York... but would a character from a New York Bestseller novel work even if the character never steps foot in NY?

lekha: As for the poem, what kind of topic that I write about do you think will set me apart from the rest of the applicants?

You shouldn't be asking that question, they want you to write a poem that is about you, don't just write one to be different, write about what you really are. They probably know we are not all masterfull poets, so just write what is true to you

AIRanimechiic-

I don't think that a character from a book on the NY Bestseller list qualifies, simply because they have nothing to do with New York. People in New York may have liked the book, but that doesn't make the character a "New Yorker."

Anyone want to review my NYU Prompt 3 - Describe a movie of your life? I'll critique you if you critique me.

i suggest you do donald trump since you do what you like. to be honest,when i did the nyu supplement, i just pickeda random new yorker and wrote about one of their good characteristics.

alright, well i already wrote about ayn rand lol so this is what i got for a famous new yorker... what do you guys think:

I would love to meet my favorite author and most influential person in my life, Ayn Rand. I would visit her apartment and exchange philosophical ideas with her(like she used to do every weekend with her admirers). We would have a stimulating discussion on Objectivism, where she believed that man should pursue happiness and self-interest. I am interested in learning more about her life experiences,(the inspiration for her novels)which made her one of the most revolutionary thinkers of our time.

Oh, and everyone, please take a look at my other post "NYU - Supplement plz edit n review!" where I posted my solid and possibly responses to these questions.

Thanks a lot!!!