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NYU (summer in Italy, new yorker - Alicia Keys, poem, movie, program of interest



musicislife3128 1 / 4  
Jan 1, 2010   #1
so i posted this same thread a little while ago but it got deleted? so i'm re-posting it. thanks so much to everyone who already commented!!! your suggestions were great and i used most of them. any new comments/suggestions would be greatly appreciated!! and i'm happy to read anyone else's who comments. thanks!!

In addition to any work experience that you listed on your application, please tell us how you spent your most recent summer vacation.
The most prominent part of my summer was spent completing a three-week study abroad program with Study Programs International in Italy. I spent most of my time in Siena, where I lived with an Italian family and attended Italian classes at the Dante Alighieri School. I got to witness the famous Siena Palio and I also travelled to other parts of Italy, including Pompeii, Sorrento, Capri, Florence, and Rome. My Italian comprehension and speaking improved and I met many great people.

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)

I would love to spend a day with Alicia Keys, a strong, independent, and talented music lover like myself. First, Alicia would show me around her native Manhattan. As we walk and munch on pizza, she would tell me about her life and her experience in the music industry. After that, we would see "RENT" on Broadway. Then to end a perfect day, we would compose a duet on the piano together which we would later perform-with Alicia singing of course-in front of thousands at Madison Square Garden.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
Walking boldly, proud, and upright
Along a winding road in daylight
She hums her own, special tune
But listens pleasantly to the birds of June
And when the wind became too strong
It knocked her down where she didn't belong
But she understood and kept her smile
And got right back up to stroll awhile

i particularly need help with my poem!! im not very good at writing poetry lol. does it sound ok? any suggestions?

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

Juxtaposition is the story of Chelsea Moore, a passionate and hard-working woman, who grows up in Chicago and later brings together her two childhood dreams in exchange for one life of happiness. This must-see film documents Chelsea's struggle to make a name for herself in New York's music industry, as well as travel around the world and satiate her craving for experiencing new cultures. Will she be able to reach her goals of success? Or will NYC and the rest of the world get the best of her?

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

Ever since I began playing piano as a little girl, I have had a strong passion for music. As I grew older, I developed an even stronger passion for sharing music with others and helping spread music's joy. The people working behind the scenes in the music industry play a big role in keeping music alive and I want to be apart of that group of people. NYU's music business program, as well as being located in NYC, would provide me with everything I need to achieve my goals.

damo 9 / 29  
Jan 2, 2010   #2
perhaps
"while enjoying the birds of June"
"when the wind of ---- became too strong" (add some kind of hardship, peer pressure, ect)
get rid of the "and"s and "but"s where you can it will sound more fluid
beside that i think it is a decent poem with a decent rhyme scheme.

Take a look at my rap that I wrote for UVA, it might give you some ideas on how to rhyme :]
samisglam 2 / 5  
Jan 2, 2010   #3
i think your personality really shines through these prompts. the poem is a bit different from what most nyu ads expect (its rhymes too much) but from the poem i understand your passions and who you are as a person.

i know it is past the fall 2010 deadline but i just wanted to let you know that this is really good.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Jan 2, 2010   #4
My Italian comprehension and speaking improved and I met many great people. It might sound better like this; My speaking and comprehension of Italian improved, and I met many great people.

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her two childhood dreams to create one life of happiness.

This must-see film documents Chelsea's struggle to make a name for herself in New York's music industry, as well as travelingaround the world to satiate her craving for experiencing new cultures.

...sharing music with others and helping to spread the joy of music.

This is great! Good luck in New York and have fun in school!
OP musicislife3128 1 / 4  
Jan 4, 2010   #5
thanks sooo much guys!!! i didn't get to use your suggestions though cuz i had to submit the app on the 1st (sorry, i should have mentioned that). and its a huge bummer too cuz they're great corrections and i definitely would have used them =[ but i really appreciate you taking the time to read this!!! and i appreciate the compliments!! thank you!!!
smallick13 - / 26  
Jan 5, 2010   #6
musicislife3128
chelsea,

i think u are on the right route but i am sure i read something similar to ur poem for nyu. u might want to make it shorter and provide more details that just getting back up. it's what everyone is writing.


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