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One with Martial arts (FGCU-Activity that has been meaningful to you)



Jfils 3 / 6  
Nov 24, 2009   #1
Prompt:
Describe an activity, interest, experience, or achievement in your life (this could be a book, movie, or an activity or experience at work, home, or school) that has been particularly meaningful to you.

Alone in the darkness behind my eyelids, I hear silence. I hear nothing but the wings of the butterflies in my stomach, frantic and restless. I am anything but alone, surrounded by many sensei with judgment in their eyes. I feel each stare, which feels ice cold and freezes me for a moment. I break free, and use that initial energy to explode into my Kata. I am wearing my heavyweight Gi uniform but am seemingly weightless, as I move swiftly, and punch through the air as if it were solid. Before I knew it, it was over; I had faced a huge fear and won my first trophy, at my first tournament. At this moment I felt a sense of empowerment I had not felt before; I knew Martial arts was something I loved.

Martial arts by definition are any traditional form of self-defense or combat that utilizes physical skill and coordination without weapons. A person who actually practices martial arts will tell you different. That definition is limited, and does not encompass a true portrayal of martial arts. I have been doing martial arts for 2 years. Martial arts teach confidence, discipline, and builds self reliance. I transfer what I have learned in Martial arts into my everyday life. Since I have been practicing martial arts I look at situations in a different manner, whether it's at home, with friends, or at school. Like when I have to complete presentations in front of my peers, and anxiety builds. I think back to that first tournament, which serves as a precedent to the amount of confidence I truly have. The patience I have gained allows me step back from a situation and analyze it, before I act. I put forth the discipline in my responsibilities, where I complete what needs to be done with diligence despite the lust for recreation.

Since I started martial arts, a part of me has appeared that since then I had not been able to grasp. I take what I learn with me wherever I go. I don't see it as my life revolving around Martial arts, yet as Martial arts becoming one with my life.

Any criticism and revisions are greatly appreciated!

OP Jfils 3 / 6  
Nov 25, 2009   #2
Anyone? Please?
icemaster2340 14 / 34  
Nov 25, 2009   #3
Hey I do lots of Martial arts too!
Taekwondo
Muay Thai
Wing Chun
etc.

Anyways, I think you wrote pretty well, but maybe you could add more depth to it. It seems a little too short in my opinion. Sorry I'm not of much help since I'm not that pro. XP
OP Jfils 3 / 6  
Nov 26, 2009   #4
Thank you, any comments are appreciated. I do agree with possibly going more in depth.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Nov 26, 2009   #5
Great writing here...

I hear nothing but the wings of the butterflies in my stomach, frantic and restless. ----> my favorite sentence.

I am anything but alone, surrounded by many sensei with judgment in their eyes. I feel each stare, which feels ice cold and freezing me for a moment.

Since I have been practicing martial arts, I look at situations in a different manner -- whether it's at home, with friends, or at school. Like When I have to complete presentations in front of my peers, for example, and anxiety builds, I think back to that first tournament, which serves as precedent (not what precedent means... you mean "evidence") of the amount of confidence I truly have.

Yes, and you learned how to focus all your attention into a single, crucial moment -- meditative action.
Great essay!


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