Choosing a college is one of the most important decisions of my life. I believe that the opportunities that are provided at Ohio State will allow me to be successful in li fe.
Not helpful. Don't tell them choosing a college is important, and don't tell them that you think Ohio state will help you be successful. That is called "wasting sentences."
the spirit that each student possesses for the university. --- this is not so good, either, because every student is different... Unless you have some good examples to back this up, it does not mean much. This is something you see at any school:
Whether it be walking around the campus decked out in their Ohio State gear, or jumping around in the Horseshoe when the football team is playing "that school up north," Michigan.---Also, this is an incomplete sentence.
I believe that I will have this opportunity from the skills that I will obtain in college.-- this is the third time to asserted that you think you'll get opportunities by going there.
Sorry to be critical, Jacob! But this essay needs to be rewritten, and it needs to be ABOUT something. It needs to be about your interests... articles you have recently read about entrepreneurship, for example. You did not even specify what kind of business you would like to start. I think you need to do some reading and mindmapping, and then write an inspired essay.
:-)