Unanswered [0]
  

Home / Undergraduate   % width   Posts: 3


'opportunity to travel anywhere in the world' - Colgate supplement essay



phhai 7 / 25  
Jan 15, 2012   #1
Hi everyone, it is almost the deadline of Colgate University. I entrust you guys to have 1 last look to my supplements. Please help figuring out minors grammatical errors or spell check, and give me your thoughts about my essay.

I have and I will return the favors.
Thank you
Colgate prompt: .If you had the opportunity to travel anywhere in the world during your time at Colgate, where would you go, and why?

There were times when I asked my mother why a flag have similar colors to an Italian flag steadfastly adorned my father's desk. After growing up a little, I realized that the item actually belonged to a lovely country - Bulgaria.

Bulgaria was planted in me through the retold memories of my parents: such Bulgarian fascinating tradition to show disagreements by nodding, while awkwardly shake their heads for approval. I was told of vivid adventures on antique traveling trains of Sofia, the country's capital city. My childhood also filled with the warm embrace and aroma of Bulgarian cuisine. Fresh yogurt and crunchy cucumber graced the mystical tase of Tarator soup, while Christmas dinners never failed to have fresh warm Banista. And I always remember that wonderful feeling when I ended a tiring day with a sip of Bulgarian fermented drink, Boza. Whenever he saw my amazement and endearment for Bulgaria's culture, my father always responded with a smile:" Wait until you have a taste of real Bulgaria".

However, I still have not had the chance to set foot on the soil of Bulgaria. The country is no longer in its golden times, and only flickers like an old flame in the ruins. Yet it give me more reasons to experience the place if I given the chance by Colgate University. It is time for me to grow up from my inner child, to create stories of his own, and shatter walls that limited his visions. Only when I relate my own experience to my knowledge, I could connect to the outside world.

No longer the magical realms of my childhood dreams, present day Bulgaria with its faded beauty and unknown adventures awaits me.

awsmness /  
Jan 15, 2012   #2
Good read... and
"THAT ITEM " .. Are u sure?

Why a flag having similar colors ?? ..is better

Do return the favor!!!
anonymous124 4 / 6  
Jan 15, 2012   #3
- mystical tase of Tarator soup
- taste of real Bulgaria".
- experience the place if I given the chance by Colgate
- sounds a little awkward at the end i think, please review

Overall, a good essay!


Home / Undergraduate / 'opportunity to travel anywhere in the world' - Colgate supplement essay
ⓘ Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳