Overcoming perfectionism - U of T Supplemental Essay

I would like feedback regarding this ( I know the last sentence about A small step to a hopeful future is very awkward and i will likely remove it unless i figure out another way )

Briefly describe a personal goal you have set for yourself, and how long you have been working to achieve this goal. In your answer, please outline who you turned to for advice and/or help to achieve this goal, and what was their role? What did you learn about yourself? (120 words max)

Maladaptive perfectionism - setting unrealistic standards and having an all-or-nothing mindset - had regrettably inhibited my work during my high-school years. I grew up tying my value to what I could produce, so anything less than "perfect" felt like failure. In robotics, this meant rewriting code endlessly until it broke; in my personal projects, I burned out before finishing anything. This started to shift last year when a close friend stepped in. He's direct, sometimes annoyingly so, and keeps me accountable by pointing out when I'm overthinking or stuck polishing details that don't matter. When I finally completed my first project, although messy, I realised such results come from consistency rather than a flawless workflow. A small step to a hopeful future.

You need to be more specific in your essays. You are always over reaching instead of focusing your statement responses. Let me give you sample quick responses that you can expand on. What have you been working on? A Robotics project. How long have you been working on it? 5 years. Who did you turn to to help you complete this project? Think of Someone who guided your interest in Robotics and guided the completion of your project. Do not give an answer that your friend pushed you to finish the project. That means nothing in terms of influencing you and creating your mindset that pushed you towards this career in particular. Vague answers and unfocused topics will never work in statement responses.