There were many tears shed that day, and it was an overwhelming moment.
I don't quite understand why because you did not really write about the emotional aspects.
There is a predicted water shortage here in the United States. But when it comes, people will start caring right?
an important lesson they learned is not to take things for granted.
It is unclear how your father learned this lesson.
And on the other side of the city there was a boy whose struggles living on a farm in Korea during the 1960's were many.
Reword.
Education is important to my family and me because it helps you reach your maximum potential.
Education is important to our family because it helps me reach my maximum potential?
I hope to give sick people strength and the ability to cherish small things.
Good ending in my opinion.