paragraph about personality; My cousin Tom

My cousin Tom is the most amazing personality I have ever met in my life.
Firstly, he is a level-headed person. He never rushes into things and carefully weighs up his options before he acts. Some people claim, that he is very balanced and never jumps to conclusions. Furthermore, the most characteristic thing about Tom is his cheerfulness and unprecedented sense of humor. It is rare to cheer everybody up in different situations, yet he always manages to do it. People automatically gravitate to him when we are out- he is always the life and soul of any party we go to. However, my relative tends to be quite stubborn -once he has made a decision, nothing can change his mind. For example, in some situations he is so determined not to change his position, even when people think he is being unreasonable.

All in all, I'm glad to have Tom as my cousin. It is a pleasure to be with him and I really enjoy his company.

My cousin Tom ishas the most amazing personality I have ever metseen in my life.
Firstly , He is a level-headed person. He never rushes into things and he carefully weighs up his options before he acts. Some people claim,His friends and family know that he is very balanced and never jumps to conclusions. Furthermore,most characteristic thing aboutTom's best characteristic is his cheerfulness and unprecedented sense of humor. It is rareHe has to cheer everybody up in differentNo matter what the situation , yet he always manages to cheer up everybody. People automatically gravitate to him when we are out- he is always the life and soul of any party.we go to . However, my relative tends to be quite stubborn -once he has made a decision, nothing can change his mind. For example, in some situations he is so determined not to change his position, even when people think he is being unreasonable.Tom has shown great strength in decision making.

All in all, I'm glad to have Tom as my cousin. It is a pleasure to be with him and I really enjoy his company.

wow.
I am shocked;0)))) But I needed linking words in my writing;(

Very interesting. But if this is an undergraduate admission, shouldn't it be longer?
maybe you should write how his personality affected/changed you?